Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Now a days there are many different opinion about this topic. I strongly believe that organizing sports event like Football, hocky, baseball won't affect or create compition between countries. Although, it can create good environment between two countires.

First of all, Sports has nothing to do with friendships of countries. it is totally different thing. Meanwhile, there are some people believe that sports event create competition between countries and ruin freindships. No dobut that if one country lose it might affect the people who like sports but not the entire country itself. For example, India and pakistan. There is a sport called cricket and many people from both sides watch this game but if one side lose it will not affect countires Prime Minister.

On the other hand, some international sports bring both countires together. For instance, if russia organizing the event between russia and turkey it will benfit russia. Why? because it will bring revenue for the country and in future it might be opposite so it will create friendhship between them .Also there are many countries that fight with neighbour country like US and ukraine but there is nothing to do with sports.

In conclusion, considering all the point mentioned above i personally believe that organizing sports event like hockey, cricket , Hyrox, Football wolrd cup are a good way to bring countries together, However those people who believe that this might create tension, competition between countries; sports has nothing to do with countries in term of freindship but it can be benificial for those who organize the sports in their country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the India-Pakistan cricket example and the Russia-Turkey revenue example are somewhat superficial and lack depth. The essay tends to repeat the same points rather than extending them logically. While the position is clear, the supporting evidence is not fully developed, and some points, such as the mention of US and Ukraine, are disconnected from the main argument. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations for why these events foster unity or competition, rather than simply stating that they do.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Meanwhile' is used incorrectly to introduce a counter-argument, and 'No dobut' (typo) is used as a transition. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between the general statement and the specific example is abrupt. The conclusion summarizes the points, but the phrasing is repetitive and lacks a sophisticated flow. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'hocky', 'compition', 'countires', 'dobut', and 'wolrd'. Additionally, the word choice is often simplistic or repetitive, such as using 'good environment' or 'nothing to do with'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to international relations and sports, and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that distract the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'if russia organizing the event... it will benfit russia' (incorrect verb tense/structure) and 'those people who believe that this might create tension... sports has nothing to do with countries'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization of proper nouns like 'russia' and 'ukraine'. The frequency of these errors, combined with the limited range of structures, indicates a need for more practice with complex sentence formation and basic grammatical accuracy.

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