Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

One of the most conspicuous trend of today's world is colossal upsurage in the number of the people believing that Olympics or Football World Cup which are international sports events is best way to togethers others countries. However, rest of individuals are not agree with this as they seem that create more conflicts between nations. I support former view that I will explain in upcoming parargrapghs along with my opinion.

There are number of arguments in favour of why these events are helpful for together countries.Most preponderant one is that strengthen bonding not only contribute to expand more import and export business among nations but also leads to numerous other benefits such as increase economy of nations by doing business between countries. Thanks to wide range of advantages it offers, as it benefits more when it comes to being effective. In addition, it can also enhances the productivity and quality of people's lives with much ease, efficacy and convenience. For example, a recent survey by Jagg Bani newpapers reveals that 70% income increase of india is possible due to promte such events in other countries and by doing this they start to do business among other nations. Therefore, all these merits stand one in good stead, as far as argumenting their chances of prosperity and excellence is concerned.

Whereas, the pivotal aspect of create fightings between countries due to competitions by helding such eventsis that it is highly likely to help me thrive and excel in varied areas. Besides, only when one follow such a system, they can broaden their horizons, thus learning such essential attributes as responsibilities, dedications and perseverance. To give a clear instance, a study on international sports shows that create jealous between nations due to won feeling in players. Hence, it is apparent why many are in the favour of this staement.

To conclude, dealing with international games are helpful to improve relationship between countries mainly would be more adavntageous. It can effectively strengthen the bonding between nations and potential impact of this are too great to ignore.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to discuss both views regarding international sports events and gives a personal opinion in the introduction. However, the development of ideas is heavily hindered by severe language errors and unintelligible phrasing, particularly in the body paragraphs. For instance, the second paragraph attempts to link sports events to economic benefits and import-export growth, but phrases like 'helpful for together countries' and 'increase economy of nations' are extremely vague and repetitive. The third paragraph is particularly confusing, mixing concepts of personal thriving with international conflict and jealousy. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the arguments are poorly extended and often lack logical support, leaning towards Band 5.0 descriptors where ideas are limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into four paragraphs, which provides a basic visual structure. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by poor sentence construction and inadequate cohesive devices. Phrases such as 'Thanks to wide range of advantages it offers, as it benefits more when it comes to being effective' lack clear referencing and fail to connect ideas smoothly. While some basic connectors like 'However', 'In addition', and 'To conclude' are used, their mechanical application does not rescue the overall lack of coherent progression. The transition between sentences often breaks down completely, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. This performance aligns closely with Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. The student attempts ambitious collocations and less common words, but these result in severe word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'colossal upsurage', 'together countries', and 'create fightings'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'parargrapghs', 'newpapers', 'promte', 'arguing', 'helding', and 'adavntageous'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate at best, but the high density of noticeable errors causes significant difficulty for the reader, placing this submission firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive marking for attempted less common items.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is very weak throughout the essay. There are pervasive errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word formation. Examples include 'One of the most conspicuous trend', 'are not agree with this', 'that I will explain', and 'countries due to competitions by helding such eventsis that it is highly likely to help me thrive'. Complex structures are frequently attempted, but they almost invariably contain severe structural faults or missing elements. Simple sentences also contain fundamental errors. Because errors are frequent, systematic, and often impede communication by obscuring the intended meaning, the response fits the Band 4.0 profile.

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