Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people argue that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together.On the other hand, many people say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.Evey one has their own opinion.

we will disucss below the pssage both these views and give your own opinion regarding this topic.

In my perspective,international sports events are important of both players and spectators.Even through it is beneficial for country progress.For example renaldo is famous footballer who represent his own country.

Imran khan is also famous criketer who gain more popularity through criket.

Games are good way to bring countries together they build good relationship between countries.Through this way,it build a good term with other country.Every country promote good stratagies regarding games.They promote the healthy relationship between two countries regarding suport.

Analysing the statement of friendship, between countries are crucial part for every country as compared to competition.Evey country build their good relation with other country.For exmple india and pakistan are Compitators althrough they have good relationship.Even 2022 world cup held,both team supporters are very exited and offcourse team also in under prasser when pakistan win the match then whole team of india appreciate pakistani team with smile face.They did not take it personal and consider as a competitian.

In my opinion,these events not create competition, but create friendship, between countries.They promote good bound betwen team and the regulatoy authorities. Althrough they made a good stratagies to build relation with others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding international sports events and provides a personal opinion, which aligns with the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times superficial. For instance, the mention of athletes like 'renaldo' and 'Imran khan' is somewhat disconnected from the broader discussion of national unity versus competition. While the writer does touch upon cooperation between India and Pakistan in the context of the 2022 World Cup, the explanation remains brief and under-developed. The position is clear, but the support lacks depth and structure. According to the band descriptors, this performance falls into Band 5, as the ideas are limited and under-developed, and the response addresses the task only partially with some repetitive statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some overall organization with distinct paragraph breaks, but there is a lack of clear progression throughout. Many sentences are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is inadequate or faulty. For example, expressions like 'we will disucss below the pssage' and 'Analysing the statement of friendship' are awkward and disrupt the logical flow of ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and mechanical transitional phrases are missing or misused. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion needs significant improvement. This level of organization and cohesive control reflects the Band 5 descriptors, where some organization is present, but clear overall progression is missing and cohesive devices are inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a limited and basic range of vocabulary, with noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and form. Examples include 'criketer', 'compitators', 'exited' instead of excited, 'prasser' instead of pressure, 'bound' instead of bond, and 'regulatoy'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted lexical repertoire. While the writer attempts some less common terms like 'stratagies' and 'competitian', persistent errors in spelling and collocation prevent the score from reaching a higher band. This corresponds closely to the Band 5 descriptor, where vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, but noticeable errors occur frequently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily reliant on simple sentences, and attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty or ungrammatical. There are numerous punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'countries.On', 'events.Evey'), incorrect verb forms ('is important of both players', 'not create competition'), and run-on sentences. Frequent errors in grammar and mechanics cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and impede fluent comprehension. According to the official descriptors, this performance aligns with Band 5, featuring a limited range of structures, frequent errors, and faulty attempts at complex sentences.

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