Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the old era, Game was a enjoyable thing and its only need for the health. but slowly slowly its becoming a competition and winner like structure. but maximum people deem that game is a good way to connecting to one country to another country.

if where any country to do any turnament or test series so participant their to other company . and it is growing the intrest in game and to much player see that and they want to become a great player. but itis my opinion that i think some country to do turnament and connecting to another country and this is perfect way to growing the game , increasing the player , grow the country name in world, and they are making a chain like structure to one country to another company . it is good for business and it is good for country and they are growing to friendly purpuse. in the game, so many usiness man come there and meet eachother and complete the bussines agreement and contract there.

and my another opinion is the some people are spread competion because trhey want to become a winner always but it is not posiible for any team or country . because who will play good they will become a winner . it is fully dependent on your performance. some countries are expecting to become always winner and it is making a awkward situation. it is not good for our society and any country . because this made a crical and awkward situation and became war like infrastructure . people always will become a winner but this is not poosible then they will bw facing the inner problem to get lose and then they got hatred and this is not good.

conclusion- this is only a game and we should play like a game otherwise if we played like competion so it is very harmful and will create dangerous situation. but game is very compulsary in our life because we should always play game it is good fir our health and body.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding international sports events bringing countries together versus creating competition and gives a personal opinion, thus addressing all parts of the prompt. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and the reasoning is often repetitive or unclear, such as the references to business agreements and 'war like infrastructure'. While the student manages to communicate a basic stance that sports should be played for health and friendship rather than aggressive competition, the lack of coherent support and limited conceptual development place this response at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisational structure of the text is severely compromised. Paragraphing is highly irregular, beginning with a block of text, followed by a series of run-on ideas, and ending with an unconventional 'conclusion-' section. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive manner, such as the overuse of 'and', 'but', and 'because'. The progression of ideas lacks logical flow, and referencing between sentences is often unclear, such as shifting abruptly from country tournaments to business men making contracts. This corresponds to the Band 4 descriptor where information and ideas are not arranged cohesively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and occasionally non-existent or confused, such as 'winner like structure', 'friendly purpuse', and 'crical and awkward situation'. Words are often misused in terms of collocation and word form, for example, using 'company' instead of 'country', or 'turnament' and 'competion' with frequent spelling errors. While the meaning can sometimes be guessed from context, the restricted range of vocabulary and frequent lexical errors result in strain for the reader, placing it firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited. The text consists almost entirely of simple or heavily faulty compound sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions like 'and' and 'but'. There is a complete lack of control over complex sentence structures. Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout the response, including severe tense inconsistencies ('Game was a enjoyable thing'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and awkward word order ('some country to do turnament and connecting to another country'). These frequent errors constantly impede readability, reflecting the Band 4 descriptor.

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