Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some authorities thinks that it is good way to create healthy friendship during international sport event and some of this thinks that it create competition between countries. This essay will discuss both views and give opinion.

The main reason for participating in olympic games is, It built a relationship between countries. It means this kind of games gives chance to introduce country to others. It helps to economic growth of country. Take a prime example of India, It takes part in all olympic games in a result now this country has built good business with over 70% of country, that helps to them economically stable and recently as per Times of India, India has secure their rank in top 5 largest economy in the world. In addition, This games gives a chance to know country's condition, inovative strategys and source of income. Thus, It is more beneficial to connect with as more as possible country to make a good business relation and build friendship.

Some people thinks as a drawback because of It creat competition between countries. All the countries enter in olympic or football as a competition. All team aim to win in this game and make a proud to our country. This is the only way to identify skills and ability of cpuntry to others. Take for instance, In 2020 Niraj Chopara presented India in Javelin throw competition and won gold medal in olympic and makes india proud moment.

overall, I believe that, Take a part in such games to win the competition. It doesn't affect country's relation rather than it creat a proud moment for country and this attract other countries to make friendship with them and after that it makes a good business relation between countries.

In conclusion, Olympic games and football joint countries together although many people thinks it create competition between countries. I would like to say that It create healthy competition with good intention and show a positive version of country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on international sports events—bringing countries together versus creating competition—and provides a clear personal opinion. Ideas are extended and supported, such as mentioning the Olympic Games, the Football World Cup, and referencing India's economic growth and Neeraj Chopra's gold medal win in the 2020 Olympics. However, the development of ideas occasionally lacks nuance, and some generalisations are made regarding international business relationships and global sports. The position is maintained clearly throughout the introductory and concluding statements. Based on these descriptors, the response meets the criteria for Band 6.0, as all parts are addressed with relevant ideas, though some areas could be more fully developed and clarified.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. For instance, transitional phrases like 'In addition, This games' and 'overall, I believe that, Take a part' are awkward and disrupt the logical flow of ideas. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen with ambiguous pronoun usage ('It means this kind of games gives chance...'). While there is a discernible progression from discussing friendship and economics to competition and pride, the mechanical nature of the cohesive devices and the abrupt transitions prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This performance aligns well with the Band 6.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'economic growth', 'innovative strategies', and 'javelin throw competition'. However, there are frequent word choice, collocation, and spelling errors, such as 'authorities thinks', 'inovative strategys', 'cpuntry', and 'Niraj Chopara'. Vocabulary errors like 'make a proud to our country' instead of 'make our country proud' demonstrate noticeable inaccuracies. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they restrict the lexical score. The range of vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but the frequency of lexical slips places this response firmly at Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are often faulty. Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Some authorities thinks', 'This games gives'), missing articles ('is good way', 'to economic growth'), and punctuation errors. For example, sentences such as 'It doesn't affect country's relation rather than it creat a proud moment' exhibit poor structural control and awkward phrasing. Although the writer attempts a variety of structures, the high frequency of basic and complex grammatical errors causes some difficulty for the reader and prevents the writing from reaching a Band 6.0. Therefore, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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