Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is often argued that some individual believe international sports events are efficient to bring countries together while other believe that event create competition, break friendship between the other countries. This essay will discuss both views before explaining why I believe while competitive tension is inevitable, these events ultimately serve as a powerful catalyst for global unity.
One the one hand, those who support the view that fans can enjoyed that moments where the two team played together and support their team. Furthermore
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The student has attempted the task by introducing the topic and outlining both views, but the response is severely truncated at only 83 words, falling drastically short of the required 250 words. Because the text breaks off mid-sentence in the second paragraph ('Furthermore'), the development of ideas is heavily compromised, and the position promised in the introduction is never fully realised. According to the official band descriptors, a response that is this incomplete cannot satisfy the requirements for a full discussion, resulting in a low band score. To improve, the student must ensure they write at least 250 words by fully developing each body paragraph with supporting reasons and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Coherence is disrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. While the opening paragraph attempts logical organisation with an introductory statement and an essay outline, the transition into the body paragraphs fails abruptly. The writer uses standard introductory linking phrases such as 'It is often argued that' and 'This essay will discuss', but the second paragraph breaks off at 'Furthermore' with no follow-through. Paragraphing is initiated, but the essay lacks the overall logical progression required for higher bands due to its fragmentary state. For a better score, the student must complete all planned paragraphs with cohesive sentences and clear signposting.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary deployed in the opening section shows some appropriate choices related to the prompt, such as 'international sports events', 'efficient', and 'catalyst for global unity'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies, including 'some individual believe' (instead of individuals) and 'break friendship' (unnatural collocation). Due to the very short length of the text, the range of vocabulary is severely limited and insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required at higher bands. The student should focus on expanding their working vocabulary and checking collocations to improve precision and variety in future tasks.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical structures attempted include a mix of simple and complex forms, such as noun clauses ('that international sports events are efficient...') and infinitive complements. However, there are fundamental grammatical errors, notably subject-verb agreement ('some individual believe' instead of individuals) and missing words ('while other believe that event create'). Furthermore, because the writing cuts off abruptly in the middle of a sentence, it is difficult to fully assess the student's control over complex sentence forms. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to demonstrate greater accuracy in basic agreement rules and complete all sentences.
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