Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is argued that,by few individuals believe that international sports events,such as the Olympic or the football world cup, are a good way to bring countries together. others say that these events creats competition,not friendship between countries. this essay will discuss both views I'm concerned I'm in latter notion.

To commance with, individuals say events creats competition not friendship between countries. to explain,individuals say that right these events creats competition not friendship between countries.for example,if people played these international sports events then it creats highly competition of both countries because these sports is a competition sports.

shifting the final words, the Olympic or football world cup, are a good way to bring countries together. one other hand, international sports events such as the Olympic or the football it creates competition of each others countries but it is good because competition makes good life of the country. for instance, people play international sports like Olympic or football than they are win their country because they play sports of their country and future's so, i don't think thise is wrong in their choosen field.

In conclusion, people believe international sports events such as Olympic or the football world cupthey are good way to bring countries because competition makes like good but others people say it is competition of international sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to discuss both views and state a position in the opening with “I’m concerned I’m in latter notion,” but this position is difficult to interpret and is not maintained clearly. The response gives only brief, repetitive reasons: the first body paragraph says competition occurs because sport is competitive, while the next suggests competition can benefit a country. These points are relevant, but neither view is explained with a clear example or developed reasoning, and the conclusion does not resolve your opinion. The response is 182 words, below the required 250; 37 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count. To improve, explain how events can foster contact and mutual respect, then how national rivalry can create tension, and support each point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt at an essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “To commence with” and “In conclusion” signal stages of the response. However, progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated rather than developed. For example, the first body paragraph repeats the claim that events create competition several times, while “shifting the final words” does not clearly introduce the contrasting view. The relationship between the two views and your own position is also unclear, and some references such as “this” and “they” have uncertain meanings. Use one paragraph for each view, connect each reason to its explanation, and finish with a conclusion that clearly states your judgement.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “international sports events,” “competition,” “countries,” and “future,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is narrow and key words are repeated frequently, especially “competition,” “country/countries,” and “sports.” Several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the latter notion,” “competition sports,” and “competition makes good life of the country,” which make your intended meaning less precise. Spelling and word-form errors, including “commance,” “creats,” and “cupthey,” also reduce control. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and use them in context—for example, “foster international understanding,” “national rivalry,” and “host nation”—rather than repeating the same basic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “if people played these international sports events,” and you use some sentence-opening transitions. However, control is inconsistent: errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “events creats” and “these sports is,” while sentence boundaries and punctuation are often unclear. The opening contains a run-on sequence, and the final sentence joins “world cup” directly to “they are,” making the structure difficult to parse. Articles and plural forms are also unreliable, as in “a good way to bring countries.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking agreement and articles, and separating independent clauses with full stops. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to understand.

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