Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that international sports events, such as The Olympics or the Football World Cup, are a good way to bring countries together. Others say that these events create competition, not friendship, between countries.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

s olympics or shocker world cup good way to bring nation together these game game create competition not froendship both nation

first of all its very good if both of cuntery play the football .This reparsent our nation also football lover both team side .They increse thare confidence level people motivate both team same time fan cry .Because there side team not takeing a single goal .when i am watching india or brazil match is october 4 2026 .tahere are comeing so much ex brazil football player comeing one of all time grat player kaka, ronaldao etc. And other side indian popular player sunil cheteri he repersent india but india scoring nil goal and barzil take advantage 4 goal in 90 min india lose game but win the herth .He laern so many thing

Also other hand some nation is other raivery is not focus the gamr he only focus how to injard the best player and how to create fight beetwen palyer and fens .Why i take name fens beacuse both of supporting or team some time its not goal that he is fight ,abusing etc .But fen understand its only game do not take parsonal one team win one team lose .It is every game as well as always take sport sprit .if some nation organise the game please enjoy the because game develop relatonship both of countery

my concorn is why fifa doing football world because both of team increse thare bissness in groth country economic also fnes enjoy game

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views: the first paragraph presents international matches as a way for teams and supporters to learn and connect, while the next describes rivalry, player injuries and fights among fans. You also give a personal view that sport can develop relationships, and the India–Brazil example adds relevant detail. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the example mainly recounts a match and does not clearly explain how it brings countries together. The opposing view is also asserted rather than explored, and the final comment about FIFA and economic growth is difficult to connect to your position. State your opinion clearly in the introduction and explain each view with a focused reason and example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an identifiable overall structure: an opening, a paragraph about the positive view, a paragraph about rivalry, and a brief concluding comment. Connectors such as “first of all” and “also other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, ideas within paragraphs are not arranged coherently, and the progression is difficult to follow—for example, the match account shifts from confidence and fans to a specific score and then to learning without clear links. References such as “he” and “there side team” are also unclear. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and use clear transitions and references so the reader can follow each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “confidence,” “supporting,” “economic,” and “relationship,” and you attempt to express ideas about rivalry and sportsmanship. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “raivery,” “injard,” and “sport sprit.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “win the herth” and “increase their business in growth country economic.” Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing international sport, such as “foster goodwill,” “intensify national rivalry,” and “host country’s economy,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences and give reasons, for example with “Because there side team…” and “if some nation organise the game…,” but sentence structures are very limited and often incomplete or difficult to interpret. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur throughout: “both of country play,” “they increase their confidence level,” and “one team win one team lose” need clearer grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, so several ideas run together. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with “because,” “although,” or “while.” Check subject–verb agreement and tense, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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