Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing this letter about the feedback of the singing concert i attended last week. I really like the concert and the singers and the musicians were amazing. I went to the concert with my friends and we all enjoyed and had fun, and all were tired at the end.

Secondly, if i talk about the food it made our experince next level. Everything was well organised. I think food is the main reason why we enjoyed the concert because their was food from all over the world which was very good idea. We tried pizza, cookies, pasta, chicken bites.

Lastly, I would suggest that next time it should be organized in end of summer (in fall) because the weather was too sunny and we are were exhausted in short period of time but if it was in end of summer this would be a best option for us to enjoy all day.

Thank you for organizing the concerts.

Yours Sincerely,

Damanpreet Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main requirements by identifying the event as a singing concert, explaining that you enjoyed the performers and international food, and suggesting a later date because of the heat. These are relevant points, and the reader can understand your overall positive feedback. However, some parts are more fully addressed than others: the concert is not identified very precisely, and the improvement suggestion focuses only on timing. The reasons for enjoying the music are brief, while the food receives more detail through examples such as “pizza, cookies, pasta, chicken bites.” To strengthen the response, name the concert more specifically and develop a practical suggestion, such as providing shaded seating or water as well as choosing a cooler date.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, comments on the concert and food, a suggestion, and a closing. Paragraphing helps separate the main points, and signposts such as “Secondly” and “Lastly” make the sequence easy to follow. However, these transitions feel somewhat mechanical, and the first paragraph combines several ideas without developing their relationship. The phrase “all were tired at the end” is also unclear in context, since it is not explained whether this was a positive or negative aspect. Use more natural links between ideas and make references explicit—for example, explain how the performers contributed to your enjoyment before moving on to the food.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main feedback, including relevant terms such as “singers,” “musicians,” “well organised,” and “exhausted.” The food examples also make your comments specific. However, the range is limited and some expressions are informal or imprecise for a letter to the council, such as “next level,” “had fun,” and “very good idea.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including “experince” and “their was,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the message. Aim for more precise phrases such as “greatly enhanced our experience” and “a wide variety of international dishes,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main message remains understandable. For example, the sentence beginning “I think food is the main reason” gives a reason and supporting detail, while the final sentence attempts to explain a suggestion and its purpose. Some grammatical errors remain, however, including “the concert i attended,” “we all enjoyed and had fun,” and “we are were exhausted.” The final sentence also shifts awkwardly between past and hypothetical time: “the weather was too sunny” and “if it was in end of summer.” Use consistent verb forms and build longer sentences with clearer clauses, such as: “Because the weather was very hot, I suggest holding the concerts later in the summer.”

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