Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to provide feedback on the concert you arganised in summer in our local park. I also attended one of them happend on 17th of July. The well-known singer Atif aslam was there to perform. I attended the event because of some reasons. Firsly, I am the huge fan of Atif Aslam. Secondly, It was organised just 10 minutes walk from our house. Moreover, my friend was also coming there.

I enjoyed the concert because my favourite singer was performing. Futhermore, My best friend also plays impotant role.

Although event was amazing, and it gave us next level entertainment, it still needs some amendments for next time. I would suggest that you should choose vast place for next time and you could also arrange some food stalls so every one who is attending concert can enjoy food too. Additionally, places for boys and girls should be seperate so people can avoid any mismanagement.

Thanks for arranging such an amazing event. I would really appreciate it if you consider my suggestions when planning future concerts.

Yours sincerely,

Khan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the event as the concert on 17 July featuring Atif Aslam, explain that you are a fan and that the venue was convenient, and offer suggestions for next summer. Your enjoyment is clear, but the explanation that your friend “also plays important role” is not developed enough to show how this added to the experience. The improvement ideas—more space, food stalls and separate areas—are relevant, though the reason for separating boys and girls is vague and could be explained more tactfully. The letter is appropriately appreciative and gives the council usable feedback. To strengthen it further, develop each suggestion with a clear benefit and make the concert experience itself more specific.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape: an opening identifying the concert, a paragraph about your reasons for attending and enjoyment, and a final section with suggestions and thanks. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Moreover” and “Additionally” help show how points relate. However, the first paragraph moves from why you attended to why you enjoyed it, and the separate sentence “I enjoyed the concert because my favourite singer was performing” repeats an earlier point. The link between your friend’s presence and your enjoyment is also unclear. Grouping the attendance reasons together, then explaining the experience and moving to suggestions would create smoother progression. Some connectors feel mechanical, but the overall organisation remains easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “feedback,” “organised,” “suggestions” and “future concerts.” There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “next level entertainment,” but this phrase is informal and does not fit a letter to the council particularly well. Several spelling errors—“arganised,” “happend,” “Firsly,” “Futhermore,” “impotant” and “seperate”—are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Some choices are also imprecise: “vast place” is not a natural way to describe a larger venue, and “plays important role” does not clearly express your friend’s contribution. Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations to make your meaning precise and the tone consistently appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including “Although event was amazing … it still needs some amendments” and “I would really appreciate it if you consider my suggestions.” The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “one of them happend on 17th of July” needs a clearer relative clause and article use, while “I am the huge fan” has an unnecessary article. In “so every one who is attending concert can enjoy food too,” the article and pronoun construction need attention. The sentence beginning “Although” is also awkwardly joined to “and.” Practise accurate articles, relative clauses and sentence boundaries; these corrections would make your varied sentence attempts more controlled.

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