Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir

I am writing to express my feeling regarding the latest concert .

I have attented a free concert of Sunada Sharma.

I really enjoyed the concert because of organised system such as music , decoration . Moreover , i enjoyed the screen quality . It is difficult to watch a concert from last . But its my plessure that i got the proper view from projector view.

I would like to bring your attention regarding an issue of food stalls . There was limited stall options espeacilly for vegetarian people . Public felt little hard because they have to wait for food after concert . Apart from this , the area was very conjusted . It becomes hard for childern to stay in overcrowded area . For next , i belive that you would definately do your best by observing this problem.

Overall , i was a memorable experince for us because of your hardwork or dedication .

Thank you

Yours faithfully

Sandeep kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the performance as Sunanda Sharma’s concert, explain that you enjoyed the organisation and projector view, and suggest improvements concerning food stalls and crowding. These are relevant details, and the positive closing gives the letter a clear overall message. However, some points are less fully explained than others. For example, “limited stall options” and the wait for food are useful observations, but the requested improvements remain general: “do your best by observing this problem” does not specify what the council should change. Suggesting more vegetarian stalls, additional food vendors, or better crowd management would make your feedback clearer and more developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce your purpose, describe what you enjoyed, raise problems, and finish with an overall comment. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Apart from this,” and “Overall” help signal these stages. The organisation is coherent, but some connections are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “For next” does not clearly introduce a specific recommendation, and the shift from food availability to crowding could be organised more distinctly. Use separate paragraphs for the concert’s positive features and the improvements, then connect each problem directly to a practical suggestion. This would make the progression easier to follow and the references between ideas clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “concert,” “projector,” “food stalls,” “vegetarian,” and “overcrowded.” These choices communicate the main points, but the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts less natural. For example, “organised system” is vague where “well-organised event” would be clearer, and “projector view” is an awkward way to describe seeing the performance on a screen. There are also misspellings such as “attented,” “plessure,” and “conjusted.” Build a small set of accurate phrases for giving feedback and describing facilities, and check spelling carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “I really enjoyed the concert because…” and “It becomes hard for children to stay…”. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “I have attended a free concert” uses a tense that is less suitable for a completed event in this context; “I attended” is more direct. In “Public felt little hard because they have to wait,” the article and tense pattern need attention, while “it was a memorable experience for us” requires an article. Review tense consistency, articles, and sentence punctuation, and practise combining ideas without leaving sentence boundaries unclear.

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