Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir/madam,

I am writing this to provide my feedback on the waterfront music festival that I attended last week at the local park in peterborough. I genuinely enjoyed the atmosphere, food and the music at the concert. The preparations, the band and the outdoor sitting area were well managed.

What totally stood out was the stage appearance, it was so mesmerising and alot of people took pictures. It was indeed a great evening spent along with family and friends.

However, I would suggest to pay more attention on the food stalls at the venue. The staff did a great job handling the crowds but you may need more volunteers to help out. I do have some people who would love to participate and volunteer for concerts. They can help you for the next summer's concert. I will wait for your response.

Looking forward to hearing back from you.

Thanks

Your's sincerely

Gopika

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the waterfront music festival, explain that you enjoyed the atmosphere, food, music and stage, and suggest improving the food stalls and recruiting more volunteers. The positive response is clear, and the offer that people you know could volunteer adds a relevant practical detail. However, some ideas are not fully developed: for example, you do not explain what specifically should change at the food stalls, and the concert description could include a more concrete detail about the band or performance. The letter therefore covers the task well overall, but not every point is extended and supported enough for a stronger response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape: an opening purpose, a paragraph about what you enjoyed, a paragraph of suggestions, and a closing. The contrast introduced by “However” helps signal the move from praise to recommendations, and the ideas are generally easy to follow. Some linking and paragraphing are less controlled: the opening paragraph combines several points in a list, while “What totally stood out was the stage appearance, it was so mesmerising” joins two complete thoughts with a comma. The closing also repeats the request for a reply in “I will wait for your response” and “Looking forward to hearing back from you.” More deliberate links between details and less repetition would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a friendly formal letter, including “atmosphere,” “well managed,” “mesmerising,” and “volunteers.” These choices communicate your enthusiasm and suggestions clearly, and the meaning remains accessible. Some expressions are imprecise or less natural in this context, such as “stage appearance” for the visual design of the stage and “outdoor sitting area” for the seating arrangements. “Alot” is also a spelling error, and “food” is repeated without further description. Aim for more precise collocations and a little more variety when describing the performance and practical arrangements; this would make the vocabulary more flexible and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including “The staff did a great job handling the crowds but you may need more volunteers to help out.” Most sentences are understandable, and grammatical errors do not prevent the reader from following your message. Some errors remain in sentence construction and punctuation. In “What totally stood out was the stage appearance, it was so mesmerising,” a comma incorrectly joins two independent clauses; use a full stop or a conjunction. “I would suggest to pay more attention” should be “I would suggest paying more attention” or “I would suggest that you pay more attention.” The closing “Your's sincerely” also has an incorrect apostrophe; the conventional form is “Yours sincerely.” Greater control of these patterns would improve accuracy.

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