Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my satisfaction with concerts which i joined in your local park.

Last month, there was a concert of famous singer Diljeet.He is a punjabi singer and quite famous among people. I am also big fan of him.

He has numerous songs which are related to history of our punjab. I went there with my friends. This event gave me chance to join the company of my friends.We chicked a lot of photos with daljeet. Now i see this photo, it recall memories of spending time with friends.

There are some things which are needed to improve. Firstly, there are no enough space for people according to rush. Secondary, more security should be provided by council to improve safety.

I hope you will consider these suggestions for up coming concerts.

with faithfully,

Kirandeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the Diljeet concert, explain that you enjoyed the music and time with friends, and suggest more space and better security. These ideas are relevant, but some are less fully developed than others. For example, you mention that the songs relate to Punjab’s history without explaining what made the performance enjoyable, and the suggestions would be stronger with a practical detail, such as adding seating or managing entry. The response is also eight words below the required minimum, so it needs a little more development. Overall, the purpose is clear, but extending the reasons and recommendations would make the feedback more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens with its purpose, describes the concert and your experience, then gives suggestions and closes politely. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and sequencing words such as “Firstly” make the recommendations easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth, however. The shift from the singer’s songs to spending time with friends could be linked more clearly, and “Secondary” is not the natural sequence marker here. The sentence about the photographs also has unclear referencing: “this photo” and “it” do not clearly match the plural “photos.” More precise linking and reference would make the progression feel more natural and controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “famous singer,” “history,” “memories,” “space,” and “safety.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as describing the songs as related to Punjab’s history. However, several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision: “joined” is not the natural verb for attending a concert, “chicked” appears to mean “clicked,” and “up coming” should be written as one word. Phrases such as “according to rush” and “company of my friends” are also awkward. Aim to learn natural word combinations for events and recommendations, and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some longer structures, and the main message remains understandable. For example, “I went there with my friends” is clear, while “Now i see this photo, it recall memories…” attempts to connect events across time. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, tense, and sentence boundaries. In “there are no enough space,” the noun phrase needs a different construction; “it recall” also needs subject–verb agreement, and “Now i see” does not clearly express the intended past-to-present meaning. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in lowercase “i” and the missing space after “Diljeet.” Review these patterns while retaining your attempts at varied sentences.

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