Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to give my feedback about the free concert organised by the local council in our park this summer.

I attended a music concert in the park last Saturday. I really enjoyed it because the singers were very talented and the music was beautiful. Many people came with their families and friends. The atmosphere was very nice and friendly. I also liked that the concert was free for everyone.

I would like to give some suggestions for next summer. Firstly, the council should invite more famous singers. Secondly, they should arrange more chairs for visitors. They should also provide food stalls and clean drinking water. In addition, it would be better to organise concerts every weekend.

Overall, I would like to thank the local council and you for arranging such a wonderful event. I hope you will organise more concerts next summer.

Yours faithfully,

Shoban.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the event as a music concert last Saturday, explain your enjoyment through the talented singers, beautiful music, friendly atmosphere and free entry, and offer several practical suggestions. The letter also maintains a polite, appreciative purpose, especially in the closing thanks. The reasons for enjoying the concert are relevant, but mostly listed rather than extended with a specific example; for instance, you could describe a memorable performance or how the family-friendly atmosphere affected your experience. The suggestions are clear, though “more famous singers” could be explained in terms of attracting a wider audience. Developing these ideas with a little more detail would make the response more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The letter is easy to follow and has a clear progression: purpose, experience, recommendations, and closing. Paragraphing separates these functions effectively, while “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “also,” and “In addition” guide the reader through the suggestions. The overall organisation is strong and the links between ideas are generally clear. However, the sequence of recommendations relies quite heavily on listing markers, and several short statements in the experience paragraph read as a series of separate points. You could create smoother progression by grouping related details and using a few more natural links, such as explaining how the audience and atmosphere contributed to your enjoyment. This would make cohesion less list-like while preserving the clear structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the event, your reaction and your recommendations, and the tone is appropriately polite. Phrases such as “talented,” “friendly,” and “drinking water” are clear and relevant. However, the range is limited and several general words recur, including “concert,” “nice,” “good/wonderful,” and “organise.” Some expressions are understandable but not especially precise or natural for formal feedback, such as “more famous singers” and “arrange more chairs.” Aim for more specific vocabulary and stronger collocations—for example, describe the performers as “well-known artists” and say the council could “provide additional seating.” This greater variety and precision would make the letter sound more fluent and purposeful.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and some more developed structures, including “I really enjoyed it because…” and “I hope you will organise…”. Most sentences are clear, and the past-tense account of the concert is generally controlled. The main limitation is that sentence patterns are often simple and repetitive, with several short statements beginning with “They” or “I.” To show a wider range, combine related ideas using clauses of time, reason or contrast—for example, explain that the atmosphere was welcoming because many families attended. Check the construction “thank the local council and you,” which is awkward in this context; a more natural grammatical form would be “thank the council for arranging…” Overall, the message remains easy to understand.

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