Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to share my feedback on the concert that was held in our local park last week.

I attended the live music concert which was featuring with local rock band and famous singers , which took on saturday evening. It was a wonderful experience,and I enjoyed the overall perfomance.

I liked the most about the music concert was band system and lively atmosphere.The band perfomed a variety of new songs which was on my playlist.Perfomances of the band encouraged people to sing and dance. Overall, I was impressed with the sound quality and friendly atmosphere.

However,I would like to make a few suggestions for improving next summer concert.The council could provide more seating arrangements,as many people had stand throughout the perfomance.Additionally, add some food and drinks stall that would make more enjoyable.

Overall, I would thank to the local council for fantastic events.I hope you will consider my suggestions when planning next event.

Yours faithfully,

Priyanka saini

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the local rock concert, explain that you enjoyed the songs, sound quality and atmosphere, and suggest more seating and food and drink stalls. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The enjoyment is supported with examples, such as people singing and dancing, but the concert description is somewhat unclear: “local rock band and famous singers” does not specify who performed, and the reason the songs appealed to you is only briefly explained. The suggestions are useful, though you could develop them by explaining how they would improve the audience’s experience. This covers the task well overall, with some ideas less fully developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: an opening purpose, a description of the concert, an explanation of what you enjoyed, suggestions, and a polite closing. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these stages, and linking expressions such as “Additionally” and “Overall” make relationships between ideas clear. The sequence within the enjoyment paragraph is also logical, moving from the band’s songs to the audience’s response and then the sound and atmosphere. Some transitions and punctuation are less controlled—for example, “However” introduces suggestions without a strong contrast, and missing spaces after commas make parts of the letter look crowded. More precise links between each suggestion and its benefit would make the progression even smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a feedback letter, including relevant terms such as “lively atmosphere,” “sound quality,” “seating arrangements,” and “friendly atmosphere.” These choices communicate your experience and suggestions clearly. There are, however, some spelling and word-choice or collocation errors, including “perfomance,” “band system,” and “make more enjoyable.” “Band system” is not a natural way to describe what you liked, and the final phrase needs a clearer object. Repetition of “concert,” “band,” and “atmosphere” also limits flexibility. Aim for more precise expressions for the performers, facilities and audience experience, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “The band performed a variety of new songs which was on my playlist” and a conditional suggestion beginning “The council could provide…”. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “which was featuring with” has an incorrect verb construction, “I liked the most about…” has faulty sentence structure, and “many people had stand” uses an incorrect verb form. There are also agreement and article issues, as in “songs which was” and “next summer concert.” Commas are sometimes joined to the next word or lack a following space. Review verb forms, subject–verb agreement and sentence patterns, then proofread punctuation.

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