Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you regarding my feedback on the free concerts that your local council has organised this summer in your local park. Although, overall experience is quite good but there are some problems that we faced during the events.

The concert on 22nd july of local band called The Stars is very good. Everybody over there enjoy a lot because of the songs which everybody knows by heart. There rock music is too good and the best part is that they involve every person in singing.

There are some things that we can improve for next summer. This summer there is no children's playing area, no facility for washroom. People find difficulty in managing their kids who doesn't like music concerts they come over theor to experience games and other activities which they can do with their children's.

Please let me know if you require any further information.

Yours faithfully,

Bhanu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the concert by The Stars on 22 July, explain that familiar songs and audience participation made it enjoyable, and suggest adding a children’s play area and washroom facilities. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The enjoyment is explained more fully than the suggestions, however: the proposed facilities are listed, but you could clarify how they would help families and add another practical improvement, such as seating or clearer event information. The opening also says the experience was good while mentioning problems, but does not clearly frame the overall feedback. Developing these points more evenly and stating your overall view directly would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: it introduces the purpose, describes the concert, gives suggestions, and closes politely. Separate paragraphs help the reader distinguish these functions, and phrases such as “There are some things that we can improve” signal a move to recommendations. Some connections are less smooth, though. The opening’s “Although” and “but” are used together, and the long sentence about children combines several ideas without clear punctuation. The reference to “they” in that sentence is also not immediately clear. Use shorter sentences to separate the lack of facilities from its effect on families, and link each suggestion explicitly to the problem it addresses.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “free concerts,” “local band,” “rock music,” and “children’s playing area.” The wording is generally understandable, but the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, which keeps the expression from being consistently precise. For example, “facility for washroom” is not idiomatic, “managing their kids” is vague in this context, and “There rock music” contains a spelling error that changes the intended possessive. Aim for more precise collocations and check possessive forms. Alternatives such as “toilet facilities,” “keep children occupied,” and “their rock music” would make the feedback clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the opening contrast and the explanation beginning “because of the songs.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur across the letter. For example, “Everybody … enjoy” needs a singular verb, while “The concert … is very good” shifts into the present when describing a past event. The opening combines “Although” with “but,” and “who doesn’t like” does not agree with the plural “kids.” The final sentence about children and activities is also difficult to follow because several clauses run together. Check tense consistency and subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into clearer units.

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