Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir or madam

I am writing this letter to express my opinion about the free concerts which you organised freely as a local council in our local park namely Rajiv Gandhi International park . Mainly i am telling about the indian concerts ,i attended.

The Indian concert performed by most famous and trending music director, Anirudh Ravinder .When i heard about about I felt really exciting ,arranged my shifts and invited my friends to the concert .We really entertained a lot during the performance .As a Indian ,I know all the songs and music conducted by Anirudh concert ,so i loved the concert very much .

Although every inch of the performance was great ,however i got dissappointed at the end where collosion between the audiences has taken place due to lack of security .I appricitae your action and implemention ,here i recommend you to improve security ,volunteers and take support from local police which will reduce crowded collisions .

I hope you understand my concern .

yours sincerely

pavan busireddy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three requested points: it identifies the Indian concert featuring Anirudh Ravinder, explains that you knew and enjoyed the songs and shared the event with friends, and recommends better security, volunteers, and police support. These details make the response relevant and give the council a clear account of both the positive experience and the problem at the end. The enjoyment is explained, but mostly through general statements such as “we really entertained a lot”; a specific example of what made the performance memorable would develop this point further. The improvement suggestions are useful, though explaining how they would prevent crowding or collisions would make them more fully supported. The purpose and overall message are clear, with some ideas less developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a sensible overall progression: it introduces the purpose, describes the concert, then raises a concern and offers recommendations. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Although” and “I hope you understand my concern” guide the reader through the message. However, some connections are awkward or repetitive: “Although every inch of the performance was great, however” uses two contrasting signals together, and the opening repeats “concerts” and “local park” without a smooth transition. The sequence within the concert paragraph could also be clearer, moving from identifying the event to describing your reaction and then giving specific reasons for enjoying it. More precise linking and reference would make the progression feel less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including relevant terms such as “performance,” “security,” “volunteers,” and “local police.” There are also attempts at more expressive language, for example “trending music director” and “crowded collisions,” but these combinations are not natural or precise in context. Several spelling and word-choice errors—such as “dissappointed,” “appricitae,” and “implemention”—are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Repetition of “concert” and “great” also limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than more elaborate wording: for instance, describe the artist as “a popular music director” and the incident as “a clash between audience members.” This would improve precision while keeping your meaning clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “As an Indian, I know all the songs” and a contrast in the paragraph about the incident. The main message remains understandable, but grammatical control is uneven. Examples include “When i heard about about I felt really exciting,” where the clause is incomplete and the adjective form is incorrect, and “collosion between the audiences has taken place,” where the sentence structure and agreement are faulty. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “As a Indian” and the run-on sequence “arranged my shifts and invited my friends.” Use complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement and articles, and punctuate each idea clearly. More accurate control of these structures would make the letter easier to read.

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