Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

i am writing to express my feedback about concerts that i visited recently. This concert was about health. Last week, this concern held at local park which was totally free for local people so i visited it. Although i enjoyed this event because i can opportunity to know about to maintain the body fit as i suffered from obesity so, i came to know about how i can reduce weight with easiest way and enjoy the motivational speeches which is far important for lives however, some improvements need to change in next concerts due to some reasons. Firstly, it should held in large space so people can easily enjoy the whole concerts. Secondly, it ought to arrange benches for sitting people and food stalls inside the concerts.

I hope you would attention on my perceptions for next summer concerts and follow the improvemments. I will appreciate for your further response.

Yours faithfully,

Gagandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the event as a health-related concert, explain that you learned about fitness and weight reduction, and suggest a larger venue, benches, and food stalls. These are relevant details, and the personal reason for enjoying the event helps make the feedback specific. However, some parts are less fully developed: “This concert was about health” does not clearly identify the music or performer, and the suggestions would be stronger with brief explanations, such as how a larger space would improve comfort or access. The purpose is clear, but a more precise description of the concert and fuller support for the recommendations would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the event and your reaction to suggestions and a closing. “Firstly” and “Secondly” help signal the recommendations, and the reader can follow the main message. However, much of the opening is packed into one long sentence, so the enjoyment and the transition to improvements are not clearly separated. The linkers “Although” and “however” do not express the relationships accurately in their current sentences, and the final request for the council to consider your views is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the event, your feedback and suggestions, and the closing; then connect ideas with simpler, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “motivational speeches,” “reduce weight,” “benches,” and “food stalls,” which helps convey your experience and recommendations. There is also an attempt to use more formal language in “express my feedback” and “I will appreciate.” However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or unclear, such as “this concern held,” “enjoy the whole concerts,” and “attention on my perceptions.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “improvemments,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for common, precise phrases such as “the concert was held,” “enjoy the concert,” and “take my suggestions into consideration”; these will make your meaning clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a sentence beginning with “Although” and a recommendation using “so.” This shows some range, but control is uneven, and errors in verb forms, sentence construction, agreement, and punctuation sometimes make the message hard to process. For example, “i can opportunity to know” lacks a suitable verb structure, while “it should held” needs a passive form. In “speeches which is,” the verb does not agree with the plural noun. The long sentence beginning “Although i enjoyed this event” also joins several ideas without clear sentence boundaries. Practise forming complete clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and punctuation before combining ideas.

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