Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my perception towards one of the free concerts I attended at the local park which was hosted by the you.

There has been several concerts every weekend but the one that caught my attention was the Afro-beat concert which I only attended amongst others.

The vibes from the Afrobeats concert held on saturday 5th of november was quite electric, I am always a fan of good music, that is why the show was really interesting and entertaining. There were varieties of musics from live bands to rhythm and blues. I really enjoyed the Raggae musics too it was quite a fantastic night, I never regretted attending the concert.

In addition, I suggest the council and everyone in charge of hosting the concert next summer to make provision for special treats like snacks and drinks, that should make the show more entertaining and refreshing.

I hope you consider my request and I look forwards to your immediate response and prompt action.

Your's faithfully,

Nnamdi Destiny

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the Afro-beat concert, explain that you enjoyed its energetic atmosphere and range of music, and suggest providing snacks and drinks next summer. These details make the letter relevant and give the council a clear sense of your experience. However, some parts are more fully addressed than others. The reasons for your enjoyment are mostly general—“good music” and “interesting and entertaining”—and the improvement suggestion is limited to refreshments. Develop these ideas with a specific example, such as describing a performance or explaining how refreshments would improve the event for attendees. The purpose is clear, but a fuller account would make your feedback more informative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening purpose, a paragraph identifying the concert, a description of your experience, a suggestion, and a closing. This progression helps the reader follow your feedback, and connectors such as “In addition” signal the move to your recommendation. The paragraphing is also appropriate for a formal letter. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however: the sentence beginning “The vibes from the Afrobeats concert” combines several reactions and music details without clear separation, while “There has been several concerts” does not connect naturally to the specific concert you attended. Use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references to make the progression feel less abrupt and the cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a concert, including “electric,” “entertaining,” “refreshing,” and “live bands.” These choices communicate enthusiasm and help distinguish the event from a purely factual report. There are also attempts at more expressive language, such as “the vibes” and “caught my attention,” though some wording is informal or imprecise for a letter to the council. Several word-choice and spelling issues reduce accuracy, including “musics,” “Raggae,” and “perception towards.” Aim for natural collocations and consistent spelling, and choose a more formal alternative to “vibes.” More precise descriptions of the performances or atmosphere would also add flexibility and detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main message remains understandable. The letter also includes a range of past and present forms, for example, “I attended” and “I am always a fan.” Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement and sentence construction. In “There has been several concerts,” the verb should agree with the plural subject; “the concert … was quite electric, I am always a fan” joins independent clauses with only a comma; and “the one that caught my attention was … which I only attended” is awkwardly structured. There are also punctuation and apostrophe errors in the closing. Check agreement, separate complete sentences appropriately, and proofread punctuation to improve control.

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