Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

Hope you are doing well. I am citizen of your local council as there were many concert arranged in our local park. I attanded one of the concert of Amrit Maan on 4 November in Hooland park and i really enjoyed that show as I am punjabi moreover the organization was really good.

adding to it there were stalls as well from where i enjoyed food and buy some good for myself and my friends.

However, i would like to sugget some ways to improve next summers concerts, like Parking there were a huge isssue of designated parking.

moreover crowd managment could be improved and lightis for the stalls .

overall,the concert wa really good and best way to make our summers good.

i hope next year it would be more better than this year.

thanking you,

yours truely

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the concert as Amrit Maan’s performance on 4 November and give relevant reasons for enjoying it, including the organisation and food stalls. You also make suggestions about parking, crowd management and lighting, so all three task points are present. However, these ideas are brief and some are unclear: “there were a huge issue of designated parking” does not explain what specifically should change, and the enjoyment of the concert could be supported with more detail. The response is also 9 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your feedback. Add specific examples and practical recommendations, such as clearer parking arrangements or more staff to manage queues.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: it introduces the event, explains what you enjoyed, then offers suggestions and closes. Basic linking expressions such as “However,” “moreover” and “overall” help signal these stages. However, the ideas are crowded into one long opening paragraph and several short, disconnected lines, so the progression is not consistently clear. The repeated use of “moreover” and the abrupt transition to “lightis for the stalls” also make the suggestions feel like a list rather than connected feedback. Use separate paragraphs for the concert experience and recommendations, and connect each suggestion to a reason or proposed solution. Clearer punctuation and paragraph breaks would make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “concert,” “organization,” “stalls,” “designated parking” and “crowd management.” These choices communicate the main subject, but the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors reduce clarity, such as “attanded,” “sugget,” “managment” and “lightis.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “buy some good for myself” and “make our summers good.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and more precise terms for event feedback. For example, describe the food you bought, the facilities that were lacking, or the improvements you recommend. Proofreading spelling and choosing specific vocabulary would make your message more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to join ideas using “as” and “moreover.” Frequent errors in sentence structure and basic grammar sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “I am citizen of your local council as there were many concert arranged” has problems with the article, number agreement and the relationship between its clauses. “I attended one of the concert” also needs a plural noun after “one of the,” while “it would be more better” uses an incorrect comparative form. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the closing fragments are not formed as complete sentences. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses to explain reasons and recommendations.

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