Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to offer feedback of your concert which I have recently attended. It was big opportunities for me to join distinct concerts in my leisure activites.

Well, I recently engaged in traditional music concert which was held in my local park. This event was happended a stone's throw away from my house.

Elucidate the details of concert, I extremely enjoyed this show with full enthusiasm. As it presented old music, it made people more nostalgic and they felt with more roots. The music displays how rich its heritage and culture. Moreover i love this because it hold sentimental values among the listeners including me.

Even though this music concert went well, there are things that require some changes for upcoming events. Cheif among them is setting areas. I would recommend it should be wider and needs more chairs. Since it was popular music concert, audience will be rising for the next event.

I hope you will get something significance feedback to improve next event.

Yours faithfully

Ramandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you identify the traditional music concert, explain that its heritage made listeners feel nostalgic and connected to their roots, and suggest wider seating areas and more chairs. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The enjoyment is explained with some personal feeling, especially in the reference to sentimental value, but the reasons remain somewhat general; a specific performance detail or moment would make the praise more convincing. The improvement suggestion is also useful, though “setting areas” is unclear and the expected increase in audience could be explained more fully. The response covers the task well overall, but not every idea is developed with the same clarity and support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from its purpose to the concert experience and then to suggestions, with separate paragraphs for these stages. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Even though” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is occasionally interrupted by unclear transitions: “Elucidate the details of concert” does not connect naturally to the following evaluation, and the shift from the concert’s popularity to the need for more space is abrupt. Some references, such as “this” in “I love this,” are not fully precise. To make the organisation more fluent, use straightforward topic sentences and connect each suggestion explicitly to the problem observed at the event.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the letter and attempt less common expressions, including “nostalgic,” “heritage,” and “sentimental values.” These choices help convey the concert’s cultural and emotional appeal. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “feedback of your concert,” “big opportunities,” “distinct concerts,” and “setting areas.” There are also spelling errors, including “activites,” “happended,” and “Cheif,” which reduce the overall polish. Choose vocabulary for clarity rather than formality: “feedback on the concert,” “a range of concerts,” and “seating arrangements” would express your meaning more naturally. The message remains understandable despite these inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a concessive opening to the suggestions paragraph and a reason clause beginning with “Since.” The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “It was big opportunities” has a mismatch between the subject and complement, while “the music displays how rich its heritage and culture” is not formed correctly. In “I recently engaged in traditional music concert,” the article is missing, and “it hold sentimental values” has an agreement error. Review articles, subject–verb agreement, and clause construction, and check punctuation and capitalisation, as in “Moreover i.” More consistent control of these patterns would make the letter easier to read.

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