Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this to let you know that the free concerts organised by the coucil in the local park has been a massive success. It has got a large number of audience from all over the city.

I have attended Justin's music concert with my family and greatly enjoyed it till the closing ceremony. It was my first time experiencing a live concert and will truly cherish it for rest of my life.

The high-quality sound system, lighting, and the energetic crowd were completely enjoying the atmosphere. All the facilities were perfectly organised and the volunteers support must be appreciated. The main attraction was the free refreshment stalls with wide range of snacks and drinks for all ages.

I would suggest that for next summer's concerts, please restrict the passes available to public, to avoid situations like stampades and can creat suffocating environment to children.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Your's faithfully,

L

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify Justin’s concert, explain your enjoyment through the live experience, sound, lighting, crowd and refreshments, and suggest limiting public passes to reduce overcrowding. The positive feedback is detailed and relevant, so the letter gives the council a clear sense of what worked well. The improvement point, however, is less fully developed: limiting passes is a useful suggestion, but you could explain how the council might manage capacity, such as using timed entry or a booking system. Also, the risk to children is mentioned but not clearly connected to a specific practical solution. This covers the task well, while fuller development of the recommendation would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from general feedback, to your personal experience, to a recommendation and closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “I have attended” and “I would suggest” make the purpose of each section easy to follow. The sequence of positive details in the third paragraph is also logical. Some connections could be smoother: the opening statement about the concerts’ overall success moves quickly to your own attendance, and the recommendation could be linked more explicitly to the large audience and the risk of overcrowding. The closing is appropriate, though the sign-off should conventionally be “Yours faithfully.” Overall, the organisation is clear; more explicit links between the evidence and suggestion would strengthen progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “high-quality sound system,” “energetic crowd,” “facilities,” “volunteers” and “refreshment stalls.” These details make your positive evaluation specific. There are also some inaccurate or awkward choices that reduce naturalness, such as “large number of audience,” “enjoying the atmosphere,” and “restrict the passes available to public.” The spelling “coucil” and “stampades” should be corrected, and “Your’s” is not the correct form of the sign-off. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but more accurate collocations and careful proofreading would improve precision. Aim to use natural phrases such as “a large audience” and “limit the number of tickets available.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “I have attended Justin’s music concert…” and the recommendation introduced by “I would suggest that…”. The main message remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “the free concerts … has been” has a plural subject with a singular verb, and “It was my first time experiencing a live concert and will truly cherish it” lacks a clear subject in the second clause. In “with wide range of snacks,” an article is needed, while “can creat” should be “can create.” The phrase “to avoid situations like stampades and can creat…” also needs a more parallel structure. Check agreement, articles and clause construction when editing; greater accuracy across these patterns would make your varied sentences more controlled.

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