Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dead sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude about the one of the concert that you had organised in our local park.

Since last week, we had a 5 concerts for cultural and entartainment purposes in our society.However, according to dwellers every concert was meaningful,but i was pleased to watch cultural singing show on last friday.The main purpose to watch that show was to know more about our culture and tradition.

On of the main reason, why i liked this show is singer madhu bala, she is well-known for her vocal and cultural songs.Not only her singing, but her speech about our culture gave me a pleasure.

Since,eveything in show was organized, but there was sitting area where people could sit and enjoy the show.

I would like to request you to arrange proper siiting plan to make show more comfortable for audience.

I hope you would take promt action next time.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon

kind regar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the cultural singing show, explain that you enjoyed Madhu Bala’s singing and speech about culture, and suggest improving the seating arrangements. This makes the purpose of the letter clear and keeps the content relevant. The reasons for enjoying the concert are more specific than the improvement suggestion, which is brief and does not explain what seating changes would help, such as adding chairs or reserving accessible areas. The opening also says “one of the concert,” while the task asks you to say which concert you attended; naming it more clearly would strengthen this point. Develop the suggestion and give a little more detail about the concert experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable progression from its purpose, to the concert and your reasons for enjoying it, and finally to a suggestion and closing. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and phrases such as “However” and “Not only … but” show an attempt to connect ideas. Some links are awkward or unclear, however: “Since last week” does not clearly introduce the series of concerts, and “Since, everything in show was organized, but…” creates a confusing relationship between the ideas. The transition from the singer’s performance to the seating issue could also be smoother. Use connectors that express the intended relationship precisely, and ensure each paragraph develops one clear point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “cultural singing show,” “vocal,” “tradition,” and “audience.” These choices help communicate the concert’s cultural value and your proposed improvement. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “entartainment,” “siiting,” and “promt,” and some phrases are not natural in this context, such as “express my gratitude about” and “gave me a pleasure.” “Cultural songs” is also less precise than a phrase describing the singer’s repertoire. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but they reduce accuracy and naturalness. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for formal feedback letters.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “Not only her singing, but her speech about our culture gave me a pleasure.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “one of the concert” needs a plural noun, and “On of the main reason” has errors in both the opening word and subject–verb agreement. The sentence beginning “Since, everything in show was organized, but…” combines clauses in a way that is difficult to follow. There are also inconsistent tense choices, such as “Since last week, we had,” and punctuation is sometimes missing after sentence boundaries. Practise accurate clause construction, articles, and consistent past-tense narration.

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