Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I am writing to giva feedback on concert which I attended recently. It happended last week on 14 May.

There were many different concerts organised by council this summer. Apart from this, I attended one concert named Musical events with my friends. This is one of the interesting concerts I attended.

I really enjoy the concert because of several reasons. Firstly, it gave me an opportunity to spend quality time with my close friends. Secondly, the food was very good in quality and served in hygenic manner. Finally, the music system was really excellent that made event more enjoyable. As a result, it helped me to unwind after a busy day.

However, I would like to suggest some improvemet for future concerts.

the seating arrangement was not properly, so I suggest providing more chairs. In addition, It would be grateful if you could provide air- conditioner facilities. Because of the summer, the temperature could make people uncofortable.

I hope these suggestions would help you to make better arrangement next time.

Yours faithfully,

Khushbu Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the concert as “Musical events,” explain that you enjoyed spending time with friends, the food and the music system, and suggest more chairs and air-conditioning. These details make the letter relevant and give the council usable feedback. However, some points are not fully clear or developed. “Musical events” sounds like a general description rather than a specific concert name, and the date “14 May” seems inconsistent with a concert held “this summer” unless the timing is clarified. The suggestions would be stronger with a brief explanation of where seating was insufficient or how cooling could be provided. Overall, the main purpose is clear, but some details need more precise development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall structure: an opening, a paragraph about the concert, a paragraph explaining your enjoyment, suggestions, and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Finally,” and “In addition” help readers follow the reasons and recommendations. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, though. “Apart from this” does not clearly link the council’s concerts to the one you attended, and “As a result” does not show a precise cause-and-effect relationship. The suggestions paragraph also begins with a lowercase “the,” while the sentence starting “Because of the summer” is separated from the idea it explains. Use more natural links and keep each explanation connected to its main point to make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a feedback letter, including “quality time,” “unwind,” “seating arrangement,” and “improvemet” (intended as “improvement”). These choices communicate the main ideas, and the tone is generally appropriate. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “giva,” “happended,” “hygenic,” and “uncofortable.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “concert named Musical events,” “good in quality,” and “make better arrangement.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “a concert called…” and “the food was of good quality.” This would make your vocabulary more controlled and the feedback clearer without changing your ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some longer structures, including “I really enjoy the concert because of several reasons” and the sentence explaining that the music system made the event more enjoyable. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “I really enjoy” should be “I really enjoyed” to keep the past tense consistent, and “the seating arrangement was not properly” needs a suitable adjective or adverbial construction, such as “the seating arrangement was not adequate.” The sentence beginning “Because of the summer” is a fragment and should be joined to the preceding sentence. There are also inconsistent capital letters after full stops, as in “the seating…” and “It would…”. Check tense, sentence completeness, and punctuation when revising.

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