Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to give feedback on your request, regarding the concerts which your local council has arranged in our nearby park.

I attended the musical concert which took place on the last tuesday, which was hosted by a famous singer and actor, "Salman khan" a renowned bollywood star.

I enjoyed the concert because it was my dream to meet Salman khan and this concert provided me the opportunity to meet him and fulfill my childhood wish. Additionally, I enjoyed listening the song in his heart-touching voice along with the fireworks done by the audience.

Overall, the concert was good but I would suggest to improve and increase the number of seats. Additionally, people should be advised to refrain from standing on their seats, which hides the screen from the people in the back seats. Lastly, I would suggest to improve the security arrangements to avoid accidents due to overcrowding.

Thank you for hearing me and I am looking forward to improvements in upcoming events.

Yours sincerely,

Asad

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the concert as the one featuring Salman Khan, explain your enjoyment through the chance to meet him and hear him sing, and offer practical suggestions about seating, audience behaviour and security. These details make the letter relevant and give the council usable feedback. The reasons for enjoying the event are specific, while the improvement points are clear, though they could be extended with a brief explanation of how more seating or better crowd control would help. The response maintains a clear purpose throughout. To strengthen it further, develop each suggestion slightly and make the concert identification more precise, for example by naming the music genre or event title if known.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear progression from its purpose, to the concert attended, to your reasons for enjoying it, and finally to suggestions and a closing. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Additionally,” “Overall,” and “Lastly” help readers follow the points. The ideas are generally connected logically, so the council can distinguish positive feedback from recommendations. Some transitions feel a little formulaic because “Additionally” is used repeatedly, and the opening sentence is somewhat cumbersome. You could make cohesion more natural by varying links or connecting related points directly—for example, linking the overcrowding concern to the recommendation for improved security. The closing is appropriate and completes the letter.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task and includes some useful descriptive language, such as “renowned,” “heart-touching voice,” “overcrowding,” and “security arrangements.” These choices communicate enthusiasm and practical concerns, and any imprecision does not prevent understanding. However, some collocations and expressions are awkward, including “give feedback on your request,” “listening the song,” and “fireworks done by the audience.” “Improve” is also repeated in the suggestions, limiting flexibility. Aim for more natural combinations and precise wording, such as “respond to your request for feedback,” “listening to his songs,” and “fireworks display.” A wider range of accurate event-related vocabulary would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses in “the concert which took place…” and a reason clause beginning “because.” Most of the message remains easy to understand, and the longer sentences allow you to explain your opinions and recommendations. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “last tuesday” should be “last Tuesday,” and “provided me the opportunity” needs an article or a different construction: “provided me with the opportunity.” In “I enjoyed listening the song,” the verb pattern requires “to.” The sentence beginning “I attended…” also becomes awkwardly overloaded with clauses and punctuation. Review verb patterns, articles and sentence boundaries, and aim to balance complex sentences with clearer, shorter ones.

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