Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

i am writing to provide my feedback regarding the free summer concerts organized by the local council.

i attended a live music consert last saturday evening at the local park. The event featured several talented singers. Top of that, bands also participate in the concerts and they play amazing music with different instuments.

The main reason i enjoyed the event was the wonderful atmosphere. The performances were entertaining, and the sound system was excellent. i enjoyed the food over there, it was so delisious. I also enjoyed spending quality time with my friends.

However, i would like to suggest providing more seating arrangements and more food stalls. Moreover, I suggest that council should charge some fee for entry, that money can be use in next year's concerts. additionally, inviting more local artists would make next year's events even more enjoyable.

Thank you for organizing such a wonderful event.

Yours faithfully,

Devarsh Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the concert as a live music event on Saturday evening, explain that you enjoyed the atmosphere, performances, food and time with friends, and offer suggestions for next summer. These details make the letter relevant and give a clear positive overall response. The explanation of enjoyment is the most developed part, while the concert description and some suggestions are less fully explained. For example, you could specify what kind of music or performance stood out, and explain how extra seating or food stalls would improve the experience. The suggestion to charge an entry fee also conflicts somewhat with the concerts being free; clarify how this would work or propose another way to fund improvements. The response covers the task well, but fuller development would make the feedback more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: an opening purpose, a paragraph describing the concert, an explanation of what you enjoyed, and a final paragraph of suggestions. This organisation makes the message easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Moreover,” and “Additionally” help signal the shift to recommendations. The closing is also appropriate for a formal letter. To make the flow more natural, connect related points more smoothly rather than presenting each suggestion as a separate addition. For instance, group the practical improvements—seating and food stalls—and then explain the funding or programming ideas. “Top of that” is not a clear cohesive phrase in this context; use “On top of that” or “In addition.” Overall, progression is clear, with some room for more flexible linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “wonderful atmosphere,” “entertaining,” “sound system,” and “quality time.” These choices communicate your positive experience clearly, and terms such as “local artists” and “seating arrangements” suit the formal feedback context. However, some spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word choices reduce accuracy, including “consert,” “instuments,” and “delisious.” “Top of that” is also an incomplete expression, and “charge some fee” is not natural phrasing. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases. You could also vary repeated general words such as “enjoyed” and “more” with precise alternatives. The meaning remains clear, but more accurate vocabulary would make the letter sound more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, such as “The main reason I enjoyed the event was the wonderful atmosphere” and “inviting more local artists would make next year's events even more enjoyable.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors are present. Capitalise the first-person pronoun “I” throughout, and correct the verb pattern in “that money can be use” to “that money can be used.” In “I suggest that council should charge,” use “the council,” and the sentence joining the fee suggestion to its purpose would be clearer if divided or linked with a suitable conjunction. These are manageable errors rather than barriers to understanding. Greater consistency with articles, verb forms and sentence punctuation would improve accuracy while preserving your range.

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