Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

With due respect ,I am writing this letter to adress you about the concert that you organised last week in my local park .Due to short time and busy scedule i don't attend all of the concerts i were wished to attened all of these but umfortunately its not possible at that time but yes i attened one of the concert .This concert is belong to the music .I really enjoyed alot there because there is my one of the favourite singer and i love her music from my school-life. The environment here is very charming and everyone here perform in this concert is very actively.

All the arrangements are good ,everything is settled but yeah some of the settings require more hardwork next-time mainly due to hot weather everyone feel some tiredness ans laziness.There are not watercooler enough for the local public anf coolings fans are not in good working.I suggest you next-time please arrange these types of concerts in winters its good for you and also for the public.

Yours sincerely

saira saleem

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main requirements: you identify that you attended a music concert, explain that a favourite singer performed and that you enjoyed the atmosphere, and suggest improvements related to hot weather. However, the concert is not identified specifically, and the reasons for enjoying it are only briefly explained. The suggestions about water coolers and fans are relevant, but the final recommendation to hold concerts in winter is not fully considered or explained. The letter also opens with “Dear sir,” rather than the requested “Dear Sir or Madam,” and the purpose could be stated more directly. Develop each point with a little more detail, such as naming the music style or explaining how the facilities affected the audience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable letter format and moves from the concert experience to suggestions, so the reader can follow its broad purpose. However, the ideas are crowded into two long paragraphs, and the progression within them is sometimes unclear. For example, the opening shifts quickly from your busy schedule to the concert, the singer, and the atmosphere. Linking phrases such as “but yeah” and repeated uses of “there” do not always show the relationship between ideas clearly. Separate the letter into paragraphs for the concert and your suggestions, and use clearer transitions such as “I particularly enjoyed this because…” and “For next summer, I recommend…”. This would make the organisation more consistent and reduce the effort needed to follow the message.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “concert,” “arrangements,” “hot weather,” and “watercooler,” and the reader can generally understand your meaning. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the message less clear. Examples include “This concert is belong to the music,” “everyone here perform,” and “coolings fans are not in good working.” Spelling errors such as “adress,” “scedule,” and “attened” are also noticeable. Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “a live music concert,” “the performers were energetic,” and “the fans were not working properly.” Checking spelling and common word combinations would make your descriptions more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the reader pause to interpret the message. For example, “I don't attend all of the concerts i were wished to attened” has problems with tense, verb form, and sentence structure; “This concert is belong to the music” also uses an incorrect verb pattern. There are further issues with agreement and sentence construction in “everyone here perform” and “everyone feel some tiredness.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly in the long opening sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because” or “although,” while checking subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms.

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