Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

i have attended the last concert your council arranged last weekend in dherai park in our village, i have attended the concert of faiz takkor on the last day of the event which was a whole new experience for me.

i have enjoyed that concert very much as i am a big fan of faiz takor music especially his qawali and he sing one of my favorite qawali song. it was my first time to listen to him live and also when he was singing my favorite music i have enjoyed it really, and also the band there was way more enjoyable.

i would like to suggest that next time please organise these type of concert outdoor as this time it was in the hall and there was not enough space for people to attend it as most people have gone back as there was not space left when the concert started.

thankyou.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover all three required points: you identify Faiz Takkor’s concert at Dherai Park, explain that you are a fan and enjoyed hearing a favourite qawali live, and suggest holding future concerts outdoors because the hall lacked space. These details make the letter relevant and give the council a clear reason for your suggestion. However, the enjoyment is explained mostly through repeated statements that you liked the music, and the improvement point focuses on venue and capacity without offering further practical ideas. The opening also gives some event details unclearly, such as “last weekend” and “on the last day of the event.” Develop the reasons and suggestions more specifically, and make the event description precise, to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally understandable order: it introduces the concert, describes your enjoyment, and then gives a suggestion. The paragraph breaks help distinguish these main purposes, and links such as “as” and “also” show some relationships between ideas. However, the first two paragraphs each contain several ideas joined into long, loosely connected sentences, so the progression is not always smooth. Repetition of “i have attended” and “i have enjoyed” also makes the links feel mechanical, while “there” in “the band there” is not very precise. Use shorter sentences to separate the event details and reasons, and choose clearer references and transitions to make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “concert,” “fan,” “live,” “band,” and “space.” The terms “qawali” and “outdoor” also help convey the specific music and your proposed change. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “favorite music,” “way more enjoyable,” and “these type of concert.” Spelling and word-form control also need attention: the performer’s name appears as both “faiz takkor” and “faiz takor,” and “thankyou” is not correctly written as a closing. Aim for more precise descriptions of the performance and venue, and check spelling and conventional letter vocabulary before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “as” and “when,” but the response relies heavily on a small number of sentence patterns. Verb forms and tense choices are often inaccurate: “i have attended” is used for a completed event, and “he sing” should be in the past tense. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “these type of concert” and the long final sentence beginning “i would like to suggest.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lowercase “i” and the comma splice in the opening. These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the main meaning remains understandable. Practise accurate past-tense narration and divide complex ideas into complete sentences.

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