Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude to the council for organizing the concert of Pakistani singer Atif Aslam. I cannot describe in words that what an amazing experience it was for me to attend a live concert of my favourite singer.

I was flabbergasted to find out from friend that Atif Aslam will be performing live on the occassion of Thanksgiving. He is one of the most loved and admired singers of teenagers and adults. Seeing him performing live was like a dream come true. The special appearance of folk songs singer Rahat Khan turned out to an incredible experience for the audience.

Although, there is no doubt that people enjoyed a lot but I noticed that selecting basketball court was not an appropriate choice as the area was slightly congested. I got to know that the number people attended the concert were more than expected. I would like to suggest that for these type of concerts open grounds could be better choice as there is always a margin to accomodate huge crowd. zi hope the council would fine my suggestion suitable for future events.

Yours sincerely,

Abdul Basit

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify Atif Aslam’s concert, explain your enjoyment through the live performance and Rahat Khan’s appearance, and recommend using open grounds because the basketball court was congested. The letter also maintains a polite, appropriate purpose and tone. Your reasons are relevant and supported, especially the contrast between the dream-like performance and the crowding problem. To make the ideas more fully developed, explain more specifically what made the concert enjoyable—for example, the atmosphere, music, or audience experience—and give a practical improvement beyond changing the venue, such as better crowd management. The suggestion that open grounds offer more room is clear, though it could be made more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening expressing thanks, a paragraph about the performance, and a final paragraph giving feedback and a recommendation. This makes the purpose easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Although” and “as” to connect ideas. However, some transitions are awkward or unclear: “Although, there is no doubt that people enjoyed a lot but” combines two contrasting structures, while “I got to know” does not connect smoothly to the point about attendance. The final paragraph also moves quickly from enjoyment to criticism and then to the suggestion. Use simpler, more direct links and ensure each paragraph develops one main point to make the progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary and make some effective attempts at less common expressions, including “flabbergasted,” “admired,” “congested,” and “accommodate.” These choices help convey enthusiasm and identify the practical problem. Some wording is inaccurate or unnatural, however, such as “I cannot describe in words that what,” “turned out to an incredible experience,” and “a margin to accommodate huge crowd.” There are also spelling errors in “occassion” and “accomodate,” and the typo “zi.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and control. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe the performance as “an incredible experience” and say the venue had “enough space for a large crowd.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including relative clauses (“which was not an appropriate choice”) and a conditional-style suggestion (“open grounds could be a better choice”). The main message remains clear despite some grammatical errors. For example, “I cannot describe in words that what” has an incorrect clause structure; “Although … but” uses two contrasting markers together; and “the number people attended” is missing “of” and “who.” There are also issues with articles and verb patterns, as in “turned out to an incredible experience” and “for these type of concerts.” Review clause construction, countable nouns, and article use, then proofread punctuation and sentence openings. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the response.

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