Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to give my feedback about the concerts that happened last week in the local park.

I have attended melody music concert which was hosted by well-known singer called Prakash and its crew members. It was started at 6 pm evening and finishes at 11 pm. Although it was a long concert, I never get exhausted for a second because the melody music refreshes my mind and perfect event to take a break from daily routine.

Moreover I really enjoyed this concert because the vocalists sang very well and along with that sequence of song they sang is really appreciative. In the meanwhile, everybody started dancing and immersed in the rhythm of music and express our emotions such as happy, sorrow and anger throughout the event. Overall, the concert is well organized, entertaining and created a lot of memories.

Consequently, the refreshments provided during the event is insufficient and the package was also damaged. Could you rectify this mistake in next summer concerts?. Also, I would suggest you to maintain a dust-free environment and please keep a dustbin at the corner of the each row in the upcoming concerts.

I look forward you to consider my suggestions and make the next concerts even more successful.

Yours faithfully,

Kevin.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: you identify the melody music concert and its performer, explain your enjoyment through the music and audience atmosphere, and offer suggestions for future events. The positive feedback is supported with details such as the singers’ performance and people dancing, while the practical suggestions about refreshments and dustbins are relevant. This gives the reader a clear overall view of your experience. To make the ideas more fully developed, explain the refreshments problem more precisely—for example, what was insufficient and how the damaged package affected you—and make the proposed improvements more specific. The concert’s name and the performer’s identity could also be stated more clearly. Overall, the purpose and position remain clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

Your letter has a clear progression: it introduces the purpose, describes the concert, explains what you enjoyed, and then gives recommendations before closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Overall,” and “Consequently” guide the reader through your points. The sequence is easy to follow, although some connectors do not express the relationship precisely: “Consequently” introduces a complaint rather than a result, and “In the meanwhile” is awkward in the context. The long paragraph about enjoyment also combines several ideas that could be separated or linked more smoothly. Use transitions that match the logic, and make references such as “this mistake” clearer by naming the problem directly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a feedback letter, including relevant expressions such as “refreshes my mind,” “immersed in the rhythm,” and “well organized.” These help convey your enjoyment and the event’s atmosphere. You also attempt more descriptive language, though some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “melody music concert,” “sequence of song,” and “the package was also damaged” are unclear or imprecise in context. “Appreciative” does not convey that the song sequence was enjoyable or well chosen. Aim for natural collocations and precise descriptions, especially when explaining the refreshments issue. The meaning is generally recoverable, but more accurate word choice would make the feedback sound clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a concession with “Although” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, some grammatical errors remain across verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “I have attended” is not the natural tense for a completed event, and “It was started … and finishes” shifts tense within one sentence. In “the refreshments … is insufficient,” the verb does not agree with the plural subject; “I look forward you to consider” also has an incorrect grammatical pattern. Review tense consistency when narrating past events, subject–verb agreement, and the structure “look forward to + noun or -ing form.” These errors do not prevent understanding, but greater accuracy and control are needed.

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