Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to provide feedback about the free concert organised last week.

I have attended one of the concerts where my favourite Singer Diljit Dosanjh performed with his excelent performance. People from around the city visted there, since it was open for everyone.

There are two reasons why I enjoyed this concert. Firstly, I am a die hard fan of Diljit dosanjh and it was my dream to see him performing live. Secondly, he sings my all time favourites songs and at the end of the concert I was able to take his autograph on my T-shirt.

I would like to suggest some improvements that may require to make the future concerts more successfull. There was parking issue around the local park because this park exist in the centre of downtown area. So, I would recommend to use nearby plaza parking to park the vehicles. On the top of that there should be separate area for physically challenged people as well as sitting arrangemnets for them.

I hope you will look into these suggestions and I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Balwinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The letter addresses all three requirements clearly: you identify the concert as Diljit Dosanjh’s performance, explain your enjoyment through your admiration for him and getting his autograph, and offer practical suggestions about parking and accessible seating. These details make the feedback relevant and give the reader a clear sense of your experience. The reasons for enjoying the concert are particularly well supported. The improvement ideas are useful, although the parking suggestion could be explained more precisely—for example, how concertgoers would reach the nearby plaza or whether signs should direct them there. Overall, the task is fully covered, with some ideas more developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear, logical sequence: purpose, concert experience, reasons for enjoyment, suggestions, and a polite closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these functions, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the top of that” make the progression easy to follow. The connection between the parking problem and the proposed alternative is also understandable. To make the organisation more polished, use a more natural transition before the suggestions, and ensure that each recommendation is clearly separated or linked to its practical benefit. The current structure is coherent throughout, though some linking relies on familiar, somewhat formulaic expressions rather than a more flexible range.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the concert experience and recommendations, including “performed,” “autograph,” “parking issue,” and “separate area.” Some choices show an attempt to be specific, but spelling and collocation errors reduce precision: “excelent,” “visted,” “successfull,” and “sitting arrangemnets” are misspelled, while “make the future concerts more successful” is less natural than “improve future concerts.” “Die hard fan” also needs a hyphen when used before a noun. These errors do not prevent understanding, but careful proofreading and more natural phrasing would strengthen control. Aim to use precise expressions for accessibility and event logistics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response includes both simple and more complex sentences, such as the sentence beginning “There are two reasons” and the explanation of the parking problem. Meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. “I have attended one of the concerts where…” would be more accurate as “I attended one of the concerts, at which…,” since the event is finished and the concert is not a place. In “he sings my all time favourites songs,” the possessive and plural construction needs correction, and “I would recommend to use” should be “I would recommend using.” There are also article and agreement issues in “this park exist.” More consistent control of tense, verb patterns, and sentence construction would improve accuracy.

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