Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to give feedback about a series of concerts that has been occured in my local park this summer. It was an honour for me to participate in those concerts.

To begin with , I would like to mention about a concert that was held on 20th July , 2026 in Iqbal local park. It had a woderful performance by a national singer named Atif Aslam.In addition to this, his voice was extremly soothing and fantastic.

Moreover, it was a quality time to spend with my family and friends during that concert. One of my friends had a birthday on that day so we had celebrated it during the concert and made it a truly rememberable. I also had a chance to get a autograph of Atif Aslam that extremly made my day.

Although the concerts were arranged in a professional way, sound systems were not properly working. Therefore, I would to mention some suggestions regarding the upcoming events in my local park. It would be great if you could arrange for a professional team of sound systems and stage decoration. I hope you would consider my suggestions in order to make a better plan for the very next event.

Yours faithfully,

Ali Raza

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the concert by its date, venue and performer, explain your enjoyment through the music, family gathering and autograph, and suggest improvements to the sound system and stage decoration. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a clear account of your experience. The enjoyment is supported with personal examples, although the suggestion about stage decoration is not explained, and the sound problem could be described more specifically—for example, when or how it affected the performance. Developing these points further would make the feedback more complete and persuasive. The purpose and tone are appropriate for writing to the council.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from its purpose, to the concert details and your reasons for enjoying it, and finally to suggestions for next summer. Paragraphing supports this structure, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “Therefore” help signal the stages of your message. The sequence is easy to follow overall. At times, however, the connectors feel somewhat formulaic, and the transition from describing the sound problem to proposing improvements could be more direct. Some sentences also contain several related details that would be clearer if separated or linked more precisely. Using a wider variety of natural transitions and clearer connections between each problem and its proposed solution would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the letter, including evaluative language such as “soothing,” “professional” and “truly,” as well as relevant terms such as “sound systems” and “stage decoration.” These choices communicate your experience and suggestions. There are, however, several spelling and word-choice errors, including “woderful,” “extremly” and “rememberable.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “participate in those concerts” does not clearly express that you attended one, and “a professional team of sound systems” is an awkward collocation. Aim for accurate, natural combinations such as “attend the concert,” “a professional sound team” and “a memorable occasion.” Proofreading spelling and collocations would improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the conditional suggestion “It would be great if you could arrange…” and the contrast introduced by “Although.” Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “has been occured” uses an incorrect verb form; “I would to mention” is missing “like”; and “a autograph” has an article error. There are also problems with tense and sentence construction in “we had celebrated it during the concert and made it a truly rememberable,” where the final clause lacks a clear object or complement. Review verb forms, articles and the structure of coordinated clauses, then proofread punctuation and spacing. More consistently accurate sentences would make your message smoother.

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