Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to give my reviews regarding a concert organized by you which held on October 29th in Cresent park.

I attended the concert of the famous Punjabi musician Daljit Singh who is known for his vocal talent and live performances. He usually performs on big platforms however he showed interest in performing on this stage because of his regional background. I decided to be part of this function because I am big fan of his singing.

This concert made my day as it was the first time I saw his live performance. Moreover, his interactions with the audience win the heart of every individual. The show was completely sold-out as stadium was full.

However, there is one thing that needs improvement is the litter management. People did not care about the garbage and were throwing it anywhere instead of using dustbins. Surroundings were untidy although cleaning team was trying to clean areas around. To solve this problem in future, put warning signs for using garbage bins. Also, there should be some sign boards locating dustbins. Clean surrounding will add beauty to the concert.

Yours sincerely,

hk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: you identify the Daljit Singh concert, explain your enjoyment through his live performance and audience interaction, and suggest ways to improve litter management. These points are relevant and supported with details, such as the full stadium and the lack of care with rubbish. The purpose and generally positive view are clear throughout. The improvement section is useful, but it focuses almost entirely on litter; the suggestions about warning signs and locating bins could be developed further, for example by mentioning more bins or additional cleaning staff. This would make the final part more fully extended and specific.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear sequence: you introduce the purpose of the letter, describe the concert and your reaction, then move to a problem and possible solutions. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “To solve this problem” help guide the reader. The relationship between the concert’s popularity and your enjoyment is also understandable. Some connections are a little abrupt, particularly the shift from the audience interaction to the statement that the show was sold out. The final suggestions could be grouped and linked more smoothly, rather than presented as separate instructions. Overall, the organisation is clear, with some room to make transitions more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the letter, including “vocal talent,” “live performances,” “interactions with the audience,” and “litter management.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the reader can understand your feedback without difficulty. There are, however, some inaccurate or unnatural word choices and collocations, such as “give my reviews,” “win the heart,” and “clean areas around.” “Sold-out” is also not the most natural way to describe a full venue in this sentence. Spelling errors such as “Cresent” and “Daljit” (if the intended name is Diljit) affect accuracy. Aim for more natural phrases and check names and spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “who is known for his vocal talent” and a contrast clause beginning “although.” Most of the message remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “which held on October 29th” needs a passive form (“which was held”), and “I am big fan” needs an article. In “as stadium was full,” an article is also missing, while “one thing that needs improvement is the litter management” has an awkward clause structure. The imperative “put warning signs” is understandable, but a more complete suggestion structure would suit the formal letter. Review articles, passive forms, and sentence construction.

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