Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give you my feedback about the concert which i attended recently.

I was present in a concert of one of my favourite musician namely Arijit sing.My experience was very mesmerizing. As well as it was my dream to attend a concert of him and you make it happened with very affordable prices.Additionally ,i enjoyed the concert the most because the facilities were very well. Also stage were very beautifully decorated. Moreover, i was able to clicked a picture with him and that was the best memory of mine about this concert.

However,i would like to give you recommendations for future summer concert. Firstly, you should arranged some volunteers because people were did not maintained a que properly at registration time. secondly, you ought to make some strict rules next time therefore individuals do not littering anywhere.

I hope my response make your moral high to conduct a concert next time.

yours faithfully,

Fahima

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify Arijit Singh’s concert, explain that it was a dream to attend and mention the facilities, stage decoration and photo opportunity, then suggest volunteers and stricter anti-littering rules. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a clear sense of your experience. However, some points are less fully developed: for example, explain how volunteers could improve registration or what specific measures might reduce littering. The opening and closing are appropriate in purpose, though the greeting should follow the requested wording. More precise, developed suggestions would make the feedback more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it opens with its purpose, moves to your concert experience, then presents recommendations and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Additionally,” “Moreover,” and “Firstly” help signal the relationships between ideas. At times, however, the linking feels mechanical, and several points are joined in long sentences, making the progression less smooth. The shift to suggestions with “However” is understandable, but the recommendations would be clearer as a separate, well-organised paragraph with each suggestion followed by its reason. Check punctuation and capitalisation around transitions, such as “secondly,” to make the structure easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of vocabulary for the topic, including “mesmerizing,” “affordable prices,” “facilities,” “decorated,” and “recommendations.” These choices communicate enthusiasm and provide some variety beyond basic wording. However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “my favourite musician namely,” “make it happened,” and “make your moral high.” Spelling and word forms also need attention in “Arijit sing” and “concert of him.” These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but more natural collocations and accurate forms would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a sentence beginning “so that” in the recommendations. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “stage were” has subject–verb disagreement, “you should arranged” uses the wrong verb form after a modal, and “I was able to clicked” should use the base form after “to.” There are also errors in articles and sentence construction, as in “I was present in a concert.” Review modal patterns, infinitives, agreement and sentence boundaries. Greater control of these forms would make your varied attempts clearer and more accurate.

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