Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing in provide my feedback for the concert that I attended last month. I have attended the Rock concert which was performed by my favourite and the famous Queens band group.

I really enjoed the concert, especially the performance given by lead singer Sean was amazing. The ambiance of event was absolutely electrifying. The colourful lights, loud music created an unforgettable experience.

I had a wonderful time at the concert, the only problem I faced was with parking. There were no enough parking slot and no proper signs to guide towards the parking. I would like to suggest you for the future summer concert to create more parking slot near the venue and to hire trafic controllers that could guide the visitors directly towards the parking.

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to provide feedback. I would appreciate if you could consider my suggestions.

Yours sincerely,

Arsh Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the rock concert, explain that you enjoyed the singer’s performance and the atmosphere, and suggest more parking and better guidance for visitors. The positive feedback is supported with details such as the lights and music, while the parking problem gives a clear reason for your practical suggestions. Your purpose remains clear throughout, and the letter uses an appropriate opening and closing. To develop the ideas further, specify what would make the concert experience better beyond parking—for example, clearer signs from nearby roads or additional transport options. Also identify the performer or group more precisely so the council can readily understand which event you mean.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the event, describe what you enjoyed, then explain a problem and propose improvements before closing politely. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “especially,” “the only problem,” and “Thank you” help the reader follow your purpose. The ideas are generally connected, although the transition from the positive description to the parking issue could be smoother. The sentence beginning “I had a wonderful time” also joins two complete thoughts with only a comma, which interrupts the flow. Use a full stop or a connector such as “However” to make that contrast clearer. Overall, the organisation is effective, with some room for more controlled linking.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the letter, including descriptive phrases such as “electrifying,” “unforgettable experience,” and “guide the visitors.” These choices communicate enthusiasm and make the feedback specific. There are, however, some spelling and word-choice errors, including “enjoed” and “trafic,” and a few unnatural combinations such as “Queens band group” and “parking slot.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Choose conventional expressions such as “Queen’s concert” or “the band Queen,” and “parking spaces.” Proofreading spelling and checking common collocations would make your vocabulary more accurate and polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Your letter communicates its meaning, but grammatical control is uneven, with errors in sentence patterns, articles, and verb forms. For example, “I am writing in provide” should be “I am writing to provide,” and “There were no enough parking slot” needs a corrected quantifier and plural form, such as “There were not enough parking spaces.” The sentence “I had a wonderful time at the concert, the only problem I faced was with parking” is a comma splice; separate the clauses or connect them with “but.” You attempt a range of structures, including a relative clause in “controllers that could guide,” but greater accuracy in these patterns and more careful punctuation are needed.

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