Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to give a feedback of the concert which was taken in a row this summer. I believe it was entertaining and thriving performance by "miley circus" who is well known for her melody songs.

I have attended the "Miley Circus" concert which was taken in Arena- B, and it was on this summer. To be honest, I would appreciate for conducting an wonderful live opportunity to see the popular singer, eventually I and the audience who were extremely enjoyed well. It felt me deep dive into the rhythm and the way of singing.

I fhad terrible experience while watching the play due to inconvenient seating arrangements occurred while, so I was unable to enjoy the performance because there is a limited number of seats that some were broken. I would suggest the recovery the entry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the act you attended as the “Miley Circus” concert and give a reason for enjoying it, mentioning the live performance, the singer’s songs and the rhythm. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: the concert description is unclear, and the improvement suggestion is unfinished (“I would suggest the recovery the entry”), so the council cannot tell what change you recommend. The seating problem is relevant, but it needs a clear, complete proposal, such as adding more safe seats or repairing broken ones. The response is also 8 words below the required minimum of 150, which limits the space available to develop your feedback. Address each bullet point explicitly and complete the letter with a suitable closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: the opening states your purpose, and later paragraphs discuss the concert and a problem with seating. This gives the reader a general sense of the letter’s topics. However, progression is difficult to follow because details are repeated or placed unclearly—for example, you identify the concert in the first paragraph and then repeat this in “I have attended” the next. The connection between enjoying the performance and having a “terrible experience” is not explained, and the final suggestion stops abruptly. Use one paragraph for the concert and what you enjoyed, then another for the problem and a specific recommendation. Clear links such as “However” and “To improve future events” would make the contrast and progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related and descriptive vocabulary, including “entertaining,” “performance,” “rhythm” and “seating arrangements,” so the reader can identify the general subject. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “deep dive into the rhythm,” but several choices or combinations are inaccurate and make the message harder to understand. Examples include “a feedback,” “taken in a row,” “thriving performance,” and “the recovery the entry.” The performer’s name also appears as “miley circus,” which may confuse the reader. Aim for natural collocations and precise wording, especially when describing the event and your recommendation. Proofreading spelling and word forms would also make the letter clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “To be honest” and one explaining that seating affected your enjoyment. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles and agreement sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “I and the audience who were extremely enjoyed well” does not form a grammatical clause, while “It felt me deep dive” has an unclear verb pattern. The sentence about limited seats also shifts from “there is” to “some were broken.” Practise building complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and check tense consistency and article use. Shorter, accurate sentences would help communicate your points before you attempt more complex structures.

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