Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

As per the council's request, I am writing to provide a feedback on the concert that I attended at Sage Park a week ago.

Although I missed one of my most favourite artists' concert at the beginning of this season, Rockzane's concert made me forget that. Eventhough she is a budding artist, each of her songs sounded like a masterpiece.

I was mesmerized by the way she used a melodious violin track in a rock song. Rockzane's vocal strength added much power to her songs. Atlast, the crowd was enjoying and dancing to each and every performance in this concert which made the enivornment more cheerful and happy.

The only drawback that I noticed in this show was the lack of space provided for the audience. People come from other neighbourhoods as well to enjoy the series of concerts, therefore, the crowd many times were not able to accommodate themselves within the provided area. I, kindly request the local council to take this into account and maybe the extended park area near the lake could be used for the next one.

Yours faithfully,

Vani Rajavelu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0

You cover all three requirements clearly: you identify Rockzane’s concert at Sage Park, explain your enjoyment through her violin-and-rock arrangement and vocal strength, and suggest using the park area near the lake to address overcrowding. These details make the feedback relevant and give the council a practical response. The reasons for enjoying the performance are particularly well supported. The improvement point is also clear, though it would be even more useful to specify how the extra space could be organised or whether additional facilities are needed. Overall, the letter fulfils its purpose well, with only a small opportunity to develop the practical suggestion further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from its purpose, to the positive aspects of the concert, and finally to a drawback and recommendation. Paragraphing supports this structure, and linking expressions such as “Although,” “therefore,” and “Atlast” help connect ideas. The contrast between the enjoyable performance and the lack of audience space is easy to follow. Some connections are less smooth: “Atlast” does not clearly signal the point about the crowd, and the final paragraph combines the problem, its cause, and the request in a long sentence. Use more precise transitions and divide that sentence to make the reasoning easier to process. The overall organisation remains clear and effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a reasonably varied vocabulary for describing a concert, including “budding artist,” “melodious violin track,” “vocal strength,” and “mesmerized.” These choices help convey enthusiasm and show attempts to use less common language. Some expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “provide a feedback” uses an unnecessary article, “the crowd many times were not able to accommodate themselves” is an awkward way to describe limited space, and “enivornment” is misspelled. “Most favourite” is also redundant. These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but more natural collocations and careful proofreading would improve precision and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the concessive opening “Although I missed…” and the cause-and-effect sentence beginning “People come from other neighbourhoods…”. The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors are present. For example, “a feedback” has an incorrect article, and “the crowd … were” has a subject–verb agreement problem; “the crowd” is singular in this construction. The final sentence also joins several ideas with a comma, creating a run-on structure. Aim for more consistent agreement and article use, and split longer sentences where needed. Greater accuracy in these areas would strengthen the control already shown in your varied sentence patterns.

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