Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to give my reviews on one of the concerts that i attended recently.

This summer, I was very excited about attending concerts as they were organised in the city park. So, i decided to attend the Diljit Dosanjh's singing programme held on 5th may last week which lasts whole night. Additionally, Nimrat Khaira also joined in the end which makes it unforgotable.

Ever since I was a child, I am fond of singing. Thus, i love attending such concerts which particularly which emphasis on music. The best part of the concert was the lead singer who put magic in the show. Moreover, the organisation was also upto the mark.

However, I would like to make some suggestions in order to make the concerts more remarkable. If the other team members would have given more time to perform, it would make the show more fascinating. Furthermore, the prizes should be given at the end of the concert so that it motivates more people to join.

I hope you will consider my suggestions.

Yours sincerely,

Deep kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you identify the Diljit Dosanjh concert and its date, explain your enjoyment through your interest in singing and praise for the lead singer and organisation, and offer suggestions for next summer. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The explanation of enjoyment is less fully developed than the identification of the event: for example, “put magic in the show” expresses enthusiasm but does not explain what the singer did that impressed you. The suggestions about giving other performers more time and awarding prizes are also relevant, though the benefit of the prizes could be clarified. More specific supporting detail would make the feedback more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, moving from its purpose to the concert, your reasons for enjoying it, and suggestions for improvement. Paragraphing supports this progression, and signposts such as “Additionally,” “Moreover,” and “However” help connect points. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, however. The repeated “which” in “such concerts which particularly which emphasis on music” interrupts the flow, while “Additionally” introduces a performer without explaining how that detail relates to the previous point. The suggestions are grouped appropriately, but the connection between giving prizes and motivating attendance could be made more explicit. Smoother references and more precise links between ideas would make the organisation feel more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a feedback letter, including relevant terms such as “organised,” “lead singer,” “perform,” and “fascinating.” Some attempts at expressive language, such as “put magic in the show” and “more remarkable,” communicate your positive response, though they are not always the most natural or precise choices for this context. There are also spelling and word-choice slips, including “unforgetable,” “reviews” where “feedback” would fit better, and “singing programme” for a concert. These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they limit precision and polish. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling, especially in less familiar vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional suggestion: “If the other team members would have given more time to perform…” The overall meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors reduce accuracy. For example, “which lasts whole night” does not maintain the past-time frame and is missing an article; “Ever since I was a child, I am fond” also shifts tense awkwardly. The conditional would be more accurate as “If the other performers were given more time, the show would be more fascinating.” There are also agreement and sentence-construction problems in “which makes it” and the repeated “which” clause. More consistent tense control and careful editing of clauses would improve accuracy.

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