Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope your are doing well. I am writting an letter to expresed my experience on the concerts which was organied by the local council in the local park.

last weekend, I came to know about this facilities which has been provided by the local authority from past 2 years just for the people who wants to expressed their telent to their audience. After that i have searched alot on the internet then eventually found website to book an seat for the music festival which me and my friends really admire it.

At the festival, i have seen so numerous of new talented bands who sung BTS songs along with hollywood which gave us goosebumb. However, over there enviroment were full of audience who having tremendous energy during concert. which force us to be a part of the army and the band. In result we got great experience.

overall everythinks was perfect however one thing made me upset that was garbage bins. which was not keeping at right place. next time please make sure that facilities will be improve and appoint some workers so that they will help to clean the concert platform.

I appriciate if you consider my advice in the up-coming concert. Please feel free to contact me or message me. If you have any question.

Thank you

With regards,

Swapandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the three requested points: you identify a music festival featuring bands performing BTS songs, explain that the performers and energetic audience made it enjoyable, and suggest improving bin placement and adding cleaning staff. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a clear sense of your experience. However, the concert is not identified very precisely, and the reasons for enjoying it are only briefly explained; for example, you could describe a particular performance or how the atmosphere affected you. The improvement request is also somewhat unclear in “facilities will be improve.” Develop each point with specific details and state the requested changes directly to make the feedback more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to your experience, then to a suggestion and a closing. Paragraphing helps separate these stages, and expressions such as “However” and “overall” signal shifts in your message. At times, though, the progression is interrupted by details that do not clearly support the main purpose, such as the history of the concerts and searching online for a booking website. Some links are also awkward or unclear: “which force us to be a part of the army and the band” does not clearly connect the audience’s energy to your reaction. Keep the focus on the concert and use clear references and transitions between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary relevant to a concert, including “talented bands,” “tremendous energy,” “garbage bins,” and “concert platform.” This gives you some means of describing both the event and your suggestion. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the message less clear, as in “goosebumb,” “telent,” and “facilities” where “concerts” or “events” would be more precise. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “expressed my experience” and “which me and my friends really admire it.” Choose familiar, accurate collocations first, and check spelling and word forms carefully; this will make your vocabulary more effective without needing unnecessarily complex expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You try to combine ideas using relative clauses and contrast, for example in “the concerts which was organised” and “overall everythinks was perfect however…”. These attempts show some range, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to follow. Examples include “your are,” “I am writting an letter,” “bands who sung,” and the incomplete sentence beginning “which force us.” There are also problems with agreement and verb forms, such as “environment were” and “facilities will be improve.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add clauses; check subject–verb agreement, tense, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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