Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to give feedback about the free concert that was organised this summer in the local park.

I attended the concert on Sunday 13th of July. It was a rock music concert with a local band called slapshock. I really enjoyed this concert for two reason. First the the music was very good and the musicians were very talented. Second the atmosphere in the park was very nice. Many rock music music fans came to have a good time and the Weather was also very nice we could sit on grass and relax.

However i have some suggestions to say for the next summer's concerts. First i think you should provide more seats and benches for people because i heard some of them that they do not want to sit on a grass. Second there should more food stalls because we have to wait for a long time just to get out food. And it would be great if you could advertise the concert dates on your social media accounts so more people could see and come to this awesome concert.

Thank you for organising these concerts for free. And hoping that you will continue this every year.

Yours Faithfully,

Michael

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The letter addresses all three requirements clearly: you identify the Sunday 13 July rock concert by the local band Slapshock, explain your enjoyment through the music, performers, atmosphere and weather, and offer practical suggestions for next summer. The reasons and recommendations are relevant and supported with details, such as the long wait for food and the lack of seating. The appreciative closing also suits the purpose. To make the response more fully developed, clarify a few points—for example, explain how additional social-media promotion could help attendance, and specify whether the seating and food-stall issues affected you or other visitors. Overall, the purpose and message remain clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear, sensible sequence: purpose of writing, details and enjoyment of the concert, suggestions, then thanks and a closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and signposts such as “First” and “Second” make the reasons and recommendations easy to follow. The progression is generally clear, although the repeated “First” and “Second” pattern makes some linking feel mechanical. The sentence about the pleasant weather, sitting on the grass and relaxing also combines several ideas without a clear break. Use a wider range of natural transitions and separate related points into complete sentences to make the flow smoother and cohesion less noticeable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the topic and purpose, with relevant terms such as “local band,” “atmosphere,” “food stalls” and “advertise.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, including “very nice,” “good time” and “awesome concert.” There are also noticeable word-choice and spelling issues, such as “suggestions to say” and “Weather” capitalised mid-sentence. These do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Aim for more specific descriptions and accurate collocations, for example, describing the atmosphere as “lively” and saying you would like to “make the following suggestions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter uses mostly straightforward sentence patterns, with some attempts to connect ideas using “because” and “if.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but errors occur often enough to limit accuracy. Examples include “for two reason” (plural agreement), “there should more food stalls” (missing verb), and “I heard some of them that they do not want” (faulty clause structure). The sentence beginning “Many rock music music fans” also runs several ideas together without appropriate punctuation. Practise checking articles, plurals and complete verb phrases, and divide long sentences into shorter units. More accurate complex sentences would improve control while preserving the clear message.

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