Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I'm writing this letter to share my wonderful experience at one of the recently held concerts, that was held by our respected local council this summer. Out of which the 'The Orange Car Show' was one of my favourites. Being an automotive technician myself watching the vintage cars and meeting with all the car enthusiasts was such an unforgettable experience.

Moving forward, the best part was meeting with those wonderful and extra knowledgeable people I got to learn much more facts about those cars that I would have never got to know about ever.

However, there were still some other important things that I noticed and have been concerning to me that I would like to address for the next hosting. I saw some teenager guys trying to mess with the cars so was just a little worried about for the car owners because for them the cars are priceless. So, I would just request a little more security guards to be added next time and some arrangements for water refreshments.

Yours Sincerely,

Gurpreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify “The Orange Car Show,” explain your enjoyment through your interest in vintage cars and conversations with enthusiasts, and suggest more security and water refreshments. These details make the letter relevant and give the council useful feedback. The explanation of enjoyment is the strongest part, especially the idea that you learned facts about the cars. However, the improvement suggestions are less fully developed: explain how extra guards could protect the vehicles, and specify where or when water should be available. A clearer description of the concert itself would also help the council identify the event and understand your feedback more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the concert and your enjoyment to concerns and suggestions, and the closing is appropriate. Paragraphing helps separate the main stages of the message. Some links, however, are awkward or unclear. “Out of which” does not connect naturally to the preceding sentence, while “Moving forward” suggests future plans rather than introducing another reason you enjoyed the concert. The second paragraph also repeats the positive reaction without a clear transition. Use straightforward links such as “I particularly enjoyed…” and “For next summer…” and ensure each paragraph has one clear purpose. This would make the progression easier to follow and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a feedback letter, including relevant terms such as “vintage cars,” “car enthusiasts,” “security guards,” and “water refreshments.” Phrases such as “unforgettable experience” and “priceless” communicate your enthusiasm and concern clearly. There are also some imprecise or unnatural choices: “extra knowledgeable people” is not a natural collocation, and “next hosting” is unclear in this context. “Wonderful” and “important” are repeated or general where more precise wording could convey your meaning better. Aim for natural, specific expressions—for example, describe the people as “knowledgeable fellow enthusiasts” and refer to “next summer’s events.” These refinements would make your vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the relative clause in “cars that I would have never got to know about” and the conditional suggestion “I would just request…”. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are noticeable. The opening sentence is overloaded, and “Out of which the ‘The Orange Car Show’…” is a sentence fragment; combine it with the previous sentence and remove the extra article before the event name. In “meeting with those wonderful… people I got to learn,” a linking word or punctuation is needed between the ideas. Also revise “I saw some teenager guys trying…” to use a correctly formed plural noun. More controlled sentence boundaries and clause structures would improve accuracy.

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