Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

This summer your local council organised a series of free concerts in your local park. You attended one of the concerts. The council has asked for feedback about the concerts.

Write a letter to the council giving your feedback. In your letter

• say which concert you attended

• explain why you enjoyed the concert

• make suggestions for improving next summer's concerts

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to share my feedback regarding the recent concert you organised at the local park. I heard a few people praising about all the concerts.

Fortunately, I had a chance to attend one of the concerts, in which the popular singer 'Diljit Singh' was invited. I took a leave from work specially for this occasion; also my parents were excited to join as he is the favourite celebrity of my father.

I had a couple of reasons to enjoy the concert even before the event started: free tickets and chance to spend more time with my family. As soon as the event started, crowd started chanting the singer's name and I really had a great time attending the event.

Although most of the things were good as planned, there were several interruptions which can be improved for the upcoming festivals, which were: the dalay in sound, lack of food arrangements and absence of the security team. I would therefore be grateful if you could try to fix these issues for next year.

I look forward to attend the concert again for next year.

Yours faithfully,

Harshdeep Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the Diljit Singh concert, explain that you enjoyed the free entry and time with your family, and suggest improvements to sound, food provision and security. The personal details about taking leave and your father’s enthusiasm make the letter relevant and give your feedback a clear purpose. The enjoyment section is less fully developed than the other parts: the description of the crowd chanting is brief, so adding a specific detail about the performance or atmosphere would make your reasons more convincing. Your suggestions are useful, but explaining how each issue affected attendees would extend them further. Overall, the task is covered with a clear, consistent message, though some ideas could be supported more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: you introduce your purpose, describe the concert and your reasons for attending, then move to problems and suggestions before closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Although” and “therefore” show the relationship between ideas. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. The opening comment about hearing people praise the concerts is not clearly linked to your own feedback, and “I had a couple of reasons to enjoy the concert even before the event started” leads into reasons that are partly about attending rather than enjoying the performance. The list of problems is also crowded into one sentence. Clearer transitions and more deliberate grouping would make the progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a feedback letter, including “interruptions,” “sound,” “food arrangements” and “security team,” and the reader can understand your main points. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “chanting the singer’s name.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “praising about” is not the natural construction, “took a leave” is less idiomatic than the usual expression, and “delay in sound” does not clearly describe the problem. “Upcoming festivals” also shifts away from the task’s concerts. More precise, natural phrases for the event and its shortcomings would improve flexibility and control while preserving your clear meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the concession in “Although most of the things were good as planned” and the relative clause “in which the popular singer … was invited.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and the letter’s structure is generally easy to follow. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “I look forward to attend” needs a gerund after “look forward to,” and “the crowd started chanting” would normally take an article. In “free tickets and chance to spend more time,” the second noun phrase also needs an article. The long sentence listing the problems would benefit from clearer punctuation and a more controlled structure. Checking verb patterns, articles and sentence boundaries would strengthen accuracy.

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