Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era, some large organisation work a very increase for some afford and some offer thier staff. They more opportunity for staff working with other country. I will ensuing the paraghraph. I will discuss a advantage and reason.

On the one hand, organisation give a more opportunities for employes.They working a other country develop a skill and learn a new skill. Because a actully doing the work with other country and know a information othe companies and more different a matherds. Another company in different do the work. When employers do the work other country learn a there culture and development skill. Rather than organisation very profit with employers and company.

On tha other hand, employees work with other country develop a relationship and good skill. Example, america country more help a poor country rather than develop a relation. Another country increase a confident level and develop a other weekness in work. when work with other people learn a new skill because company worker different a thinking. Rather than increase a company and in worker skill. employes should a increase a company work give a worker more facilities and some opportunities. work will increase a with company as automaticaly develop.

To conclude after pondering over deal of delibertion and thoughts. company should a more give opportunity the company employes because one increase a skill and know a work with other company.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a limited attempt to address both questions: it mentions employees developing skills and learning about other cultures, and suggests that companies may benefit from improved skills and relationships. However, the advantages are not explained clearly or supported with relevant examples. The statement about America helping a poor country, for instance, does not show how overseas work benefits employees or their employer. The conclusion repeats the general idea that companies should offer opportunities without drawing together the reasons. The response is also 17 words below the required minimum, leaving less space to develop the points. To improve, explain one or two specific benefits for each group and connect each to a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning with “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers show an effort to separate ideas, but the progression is difficult to follow because the two body paragraphs do not clearly distinguish employee benefits from company advantages. Ideas are often repeated, such as developing skills, and links between sentences are unclear; “Rather than organisation very profit with employers and company” does not establish a clear relationship. Some transitions, including “Because” and “Example,” are used without a complete or well-connected explanation. Give each paragraph a clear focus, then order its supporting points logically and use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant topic words, including “opportunity,” “skill,” “company,” “culture,” and “relationship,” so the general subject can be recognised. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and frequent inaccurate word choices or forms make several ideas hard to understand. Phrases such as “a very increase,” “develop a other weekness,” and “company work as automaticaly develop” do not express the intended meaning clearly. Spelling errors such as “thier,” “employes,” and “delibertion” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for discussing workplace benefits, and check collocations and spelling. For example, use “gain professional experience” rather than “develop a skill” when describing broader career growth.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences and uses basic connectors, but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes obscuring meaning. Examples include “They working a other country develop a skill,” where the subject–verb pattern is unclear, and “When employers do the work other country learn a there culture,” which lacks a clear subject and has faulty clause structure. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also often inaccurate, as in “a more opportunities” and “company should a more give opportunity.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly at the start of sentences. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them with clauses using “because” or “when”; check that every sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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