Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country, As per my experience I have seen the so many employees are worked in corporate sector which was fresher and un-experienced for this industrial environment, So the companies was planned to trained this fresher Employees for upcoming future of their company and stay here lifelong because the company invested for the fresher they also take a advantage for their comapny to stay here and signed a bond for company which was advantage for the employee also and company also for long term journey, So now disccussed why this opportunity be good for employees, Because in the year of 2024-25-26 and upcoming the degree was not much valuable at this time because so many have taken study seriously and make a competation, So the students research at this time the market want a skilled employee and they did start to work for ourseleves to increase their own value to update the skills, so as a fresher role those students are enter in industrial market as a empolyee but not have experience so this opportunity are good for employees and advantage have a company for this investement company plan to sent them to trained and worked in another country to got the skills, knowledge and experience to became the asset for our company in future and stay here lifelong and did their job here and so many new employees to came here so they was trained also here that,s all about the companies profit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response makes a relevant attempt to address both questions: it suggests employees can gain skills, knowledge and experience, and companies can develop staff into future assets. However, these points are difficult to identify and are not clearly explained or supported with a specific example. Much of the discussion focuses on fresh graduates, training and retaining staff, so the benefits of living and working abroad are only minimally explored. The answer also does not reach the required 250 words: 242 words were counted, with 22 words copied from the task prompt excluded. To strengthen the response, explain distinct benefits for employees and companies, such as cultural understanding or international expertise, and show how each benefits the relevant group.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic line of thought: the response moves from companies training inexperienced staff to possible benefits for employees and then to company gains. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear separation between the two questions. Repeated connectors such as “So,” “because” and “and” do not reliably show how ideas relate, and the opening sentence runs into the next point without a clear boundary. References such as “this opportunity” and “this investment” are also not always easy to connect to a specific benefit. Use separate paragraphs for employee and company advantages, and organise each around a clear main point followed by an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response includes some relevant topic vocabulary, including “skills,” “knowledge,” “experience,” “industrial market” and “asset,” which helps convey the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “stay here lifelong,” “got the skills” and “that’s all about the companies profit.” Spelling and word-form errors—including “comapny,” “disccussed,” “empolyee” and “investement”—also reduce accuracy and can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Aim for more precise workplace language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe employees as gaining “international experience” and companies as building a “skilled workforce,” rather than relying on repeated references to training and staying.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas using longer sentences and subordinate clauses, but sentence structures are often difficult to control. For example, “the companies was planned to trained this fresher Employees” contains problems with agreement and verb forms, while “so many employees are worked” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also joins several complete ideas with commas, making the relationships unclear. Articles, plurals and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “take a advantage” and the comma splice after “country.” These errors frequently interrupt the flow of meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add one controlled clause at a time; check subject–verb agreement, past and present forms, and sentence boundaries.

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