Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that some international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend some time living and working in another nation which is beneficial for employees. while others believe that it is a time and money waste. In my opinion, I strongy belive that it has many pros and some inconveniences, as there are several reason to support this perspective.

To begin with one of the main reasons why spending a period of time living and working in another country is that it could offers new and better work opportunities, as a result better working conditions and well-paid salaries For example, one gets opportunity to explore new culture and regions which is particularly enriching personally and social level. . Therefore, it is evident that such companies offer free health care and free family vacation travel plans, which is incredible benefits.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response3.5
Coherence and Cohesion4.5
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall4.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies a general position—that working abroad has benefits as well as inconveniences—and gives a few relevant points, including better work opportunities, cultural exposure, and possible benefits such as healthcare. However, it only partly answers the task: the advantages for companies are not explained, and the employee benefits are listed rather than developed with clear reasons or a relevant example. The opening also introduces an opposing view about wasted time and money without returning to it. The response contains 123 words, so it is 127 words short of the required 250; this leaves too little space to address both questions adequately. Develop each part of the prompt in a separate, supported paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introductory position is followed by a paragraph beginning “To begin with,” and linking expressions such as “For example” and “Therefore” show how ideas are intended to connect. However, the response ends after this single body paragraph, so there is no clear progression through the two questions or concluding summary. Some links are also awkward: “To begin with one of the main reasons…” does not clearly introduce the point, and “Therefore” does not show a clear result from the preceding examples. Use separate paragraphs for employee and company advantages, connect each explanation explicitly, and add a conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate its main points, including “international companies,” “working conditions,” “well-paid salaries,” and “explore new culture.” There are also attempts at less basic phrasing, such as “particularly enriching.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate or unclear, including “a time and money waste,” “free family vacation travel plans,” and “incredible benefits.” Spelling errors in “strongy” and “belive” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise language about professional development and business outcomes, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some complex sentence forms, for example the opening clause beginning “It is often argued that…” and the sentence using “as a result.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. In “it could offers,” the modal should be followed by the base verb; “there are several reason” has a number-agreement error; and “one gets opportunity” is missing an article. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as shown by the lowercase “while” after a full stop, the missing full stop before “For example,” and the extra punctuation after “level.” Practise accurate sentence construction and proofread for agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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