Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that international organisation offer differnt of package for this employee to work in different nations. Although it brings some benefits for employees to gain their knowledge and experience, i think it would also more beneficial for companies that offer different packages.

On the one hand, there are several advantages associated with workers who work in foreign firms. First and foremost, people have an opportunities to visit another country while doing their work because they can explore their culture and learn language which not only gain their experience but also learn other important skills including good communication, independent and multi lingual along with, help to develop some ethical skills. In addition to it, this is beneficial for their growth and carrer. To explain, when they work with different nationality people, they can learn the way of distinct tenchniques of work and learn their language which would more important to get promotion and earn considerable money as a result, they can easily cater their fundamental needs.

On the other hand, this trend is also more productive for organisation due to few reasons. First of all, if employees work with different nations, companies can make name in the whole world which would more better to earn high amount of money and feel proud because they can work with multinational organisation and get productivity for their companies. Moreover, they can build strong relationship between nations because they would chance to communicate with different people who belong to different culture and traditionals.

To conclude, while employees would take benefits from international packages which are provided by their companies, i believe organisation also make name and fame globally and learn new experience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both questions and maintains a relevant position: it explains that employees can gain cultural and language experience, develop skills, and improve their career prospects, while companies may gain international recognition and build relationships across cultures. These are appropriate ideas, and the employee benefits are supported with some explanation, such as learning from colleagues of different nationalities. However, the company advantages are less fully developed: claims about making a name globally and feeling proud do not clearly explain how international placements improve business outcomes. The conclusion repeats the main points rather than adding a clear final insight. To strengthen the response, explain specific mechanisms—for example, how employees’ local knowledge can help a company enter new markets.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall arrangement, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for employee and company benefits, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow this structure. Within paragraphs, however, ideas sometimes run together, particularly in the long first body paragraph, where cultural learning, communication skills, career growth, promotion, and income are linked in one extended sequence. Some connections are also unclear, such as how building relationships between nations follows from employees communicating with people from different cultures. Use shorter units to separate each main benefit, and make the relationship between a claim and its explanation explicit. This would make progression smoother and reduce the mechanical feel of the linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “multilingual,” “promotion,” “multinational organisation,” and “productivity.” It also attempts more specific expressions such as “ethical skills” and “fundamental needs.” However, inaccurate word choice, spelling, and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make the intended meaning less precise: “different of package,” “make name in the whole world,” and “learn new experience” are not natural expressions. There are also spelling errors such as “differnt,” “carrer,” and “tenchniques.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding ambitious vocabulary; for example, describe companies as “building an international reputation” and employees as “gaining valuable experience.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The essay attempts both simple and complex sentences, including a concession in the introduction (“Although it brings some benefits…”) and a conditional structure (“if employees work with different nations…”). Meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical errors occur across the response. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “international organisation offer,” incorrect article and plural use in “a opportunities,” and missing or incorrect verb forms in “which would more important” and “organisation also make.” Some long sentences combine several clauses without clear punctuation, especially the sentence beginning “First and foremost.” Work on agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries, then check each sentence for a complete and correctly formed main clause.

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