Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In recent years, many corporate sectors offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time while living and working abroad. This essay will cover the importance of this opportunity for employees as well as what kind of benefits a firm can get while providing such opportunities to their stuffer.
To begin with, many people often argue that it is an excellent chance for a employee because it provides a advantage to interact with international community. Furthermore, if a person speaks in public, he may develop his confidence to deal with people. For instance, people who are representing their companies in foreign countries as a result they do not only boost their public communication skill but also making new links with other companies. Consequently, they have more opportunities of employement in future.
On the other hand, it is widely beleived that companies are also getting advantages while sending their employees to live and work internationally. The primary reason is that corporate sectors need to extend their business in other countries so that they initiate such schemes for their employees in order to advertise their products. For example, In Pakistan many companies such as Toyota cars are signing contracts with different countries to construct their production plants in order to meet the requirements of Toyota cars in these countries. As a result, stuffers get opportunities to work in abroad while comapnies sell their products more conveniently.
In conclusion, It is a mutual relation among companies and employees in which both the parties are getting benefits. It is a positive trend and states should encourage such schemes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses both questions and maintains a clear, positive view of overseas placements. For employees, it identifies confidence, communication and professional connections; for companies, it explains expansion into foreign markets and promotion of products. The examples of representing a company abroad and Toyota establishing production plants in Pakistan help make the points relevant. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others: the employee benefits are mainly listed, and the link between public speaking and working abroad is not fully explained. The company example also focuses on production and sales without showing clearly how the placement benefits the organisation through employees’ experience or local knowledge. Develop these explanations to make the response more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The essay has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for employee and company benefits, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow, and the examples are placed alongside the relevant points. This meets the lower-band expectations securely and shows some features of stronger organisation. However, a few links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “For instance” introduces a sentence whose cause-and-effect relationship is difficult to follow, and “Consequently” does not clearly show how making links leads to future employment. Improve the connections between each claim, explanation and example, and use pronouns such as “they” only when their reference is unmistakable.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate its main ideas, including “international community,” “public communication skill,” “contracts,” and “production plants.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes some phrases awkward: “corporate sectors” for companies, “a advantage,” “work in abroad,” and “staffers” where “employees” is intended. Spelling errors such as “employement,” “beleived,” and “comapnies” are also noticeable. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall message, but they reduce precision and naturalness. Build a reliable set of business and employment expressions, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “if,” and “so that.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur in sentence structure, articles, agreement and verb forms. For example, “For instance, people who are representing their companies in foreign countries as a result they…” joins clauses incorrectly, while “it provides a advantage” has an article error. In “they do not only boost … but also making new links,” the verb forms are not parallel. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “In conclusion, It is…”. Aim for complete sentences, keep paired structures grammatically parallel, and proofread articles and sentence boundaries.
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