Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
It is an irrefutable fact that global enterprises provides better opportunities to their employees such as spend a timing living, their can work in another nation. This disquisition intends to highlight benefits to companies and why this development is good for their staff in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin, this opportunity bring more benefits to worker. First of all, staff can get a chance not to explore the world but also gain more experience which will fruitful for them in future. As a consequence,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length at only 84 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the introduction attempts to outline the benefits for staff and companies, the essay is abandoned mid-sentence in the second paragraph. The ideas are severely underdeveloped, and the response does not provide the necessary depth or examples required for a Task 2 essay. To improve, you must ensure you complete the full essay structure, including a clear introduction, two body paragraphs with supporting examples, and a conclusion, while meeting the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is too short to demonstrate a coherent progression of ideas. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To begin' and 'First of all', the text breaks off abruptly, making it impossible to evaluate the overall logical flow or paragraphing structure. The introduction is present, but the lack of a completed argument prevents the development of a coherent response. To improve, focus on planning your essay structure before writing to ensure that each paragraph develops a single main idea with supporting evidence and a clear concluding thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is basic and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. For example, 'spend a timing living' is grammatically incorrect and unnatural, and 'disquisition' is an overly formal and misused term in this context. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to business and employment, such as 'international assignments' or 'professional development', and practice using them in complete, grammatically correct sentences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that hinder communication. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'enterprises provides' and 'opportunity bring'. There are also significant issues with sentence structure, such as the fragmented phrase 'such as spend a timing living, their can work in another nation'. The range of structures is very limited, and the errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of pronouns and prepositions.
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