Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many companies today consider their staff member as an important assest of their business. Big Multi National Companies hire and have staff scattered around the globe. Therefore, these companies offer their employees a opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country. Today, this eassy will discuss what are the advantages of this to the employee also to the company.

To begin, with the students those are studying in colleges and universities in hope of a better career and bright future in this highly competetive job market. Every student think of getting the best job offer from a big company along with a good career prospective and favourable measures taken by a company regarding their employee which also matters in toady world. Well giving an employee exposure of living and working in another country is also an important measure that should be taken by a company. This factor changes and shape an employee's future. Furthermore, it adds to the employee tally an privilege to get an exposure of outside world and enhance thier skills and work ethics.

To go with the companies develpment. Well companies also benefits their employees exposure to outside world as it boost thier employees moral and gain confidence on thier skills and learn more professionalism in thier work ethics. To specify, the big Multi National Companies have their branches and headquarters around the world and if we think about it why is that? the reason is simple which is it provides the diversity, expansion and product reach to the customer with ease, to add with, companies also manage to hire the best talented employees from around the globe. Hence, ulitimately this balance the benefit of the companies as well as the employees career.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: benefits for employees and benefits for companies. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the explanation of benefits for employees focuses on 'exposure' and 'work ethics' but lacks specific examples or deeper analysis. The section on companies mentions 'diversity' and 'expansion' but remains quite general. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete examples, such as how international experience specifically leads to better problem-solving or how it helps a company enter a new market. The introduction is also slightly repetitive, and the conclusion is missing, which affects the overall completeness of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions like 'To go with the companies develpment' are non-standard and disrupt the flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition from 'students' to 'employees' is abrupt and confusing. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. Improving the use of cohesive devices to connect sentences and ideas more naturally would significantly enhance the readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'assest', 'eassy', 'competetive', 'develpment', 'thier', 'ulitimately') and some awkward collocations, such as 'adds to the employee tally an privilege'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'Multi National Companies' and 'work ethics', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling, as these frequent errors can distract the reader and impede the flow of your ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Every student think', 'companies also benefits') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and sentence fragments, such as 'the reason is simple which is it provides the diversity...'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of grammatical errors prevents the text from being considered for a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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