Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In recent years many multi national companies have provided opportunities for their employees to dedicate their time staying and working in another country. There are several reasons of this new development. I strongly believe this is a good change for the growth of the company.
One of the major advantage of gaining an experience outside the home country is to know about the diverse culture and international business tactics. This is because an employee working in a domestic environment, is not only limiting his or her knowledge, but also see a very little chance to grow. For example, many organizations fund international business trips to help their employees familiarize themselves with the local environment and establish professional relationships with colleagues from other countries. This could boost the morale of an employee as well as they see potential development.
Another benefit is, companies can attract the best talents around the globe by competing internationally. Furthermore, these companies can be benefitted by employees who are familiar with global strategies. For instance, there are few organizations who take part in global meetings sending their best representatives to give a presentation on know how of the company.
I believe, its a two way process from the company as well as the employees. Although, companies have to invest sending their best talents to another country, they also see positive outcome after new knowledge is introduced eventually.
In conclusion, multi national companies must allocate a capital expenditure to employees who have capabilities to present them internationally.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: benefits for employees and advantages for companies. The position is clear throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the point about 'international business tactics' is mentioned but not fully explored with specific examples of how this benefits the employee's career path. Similarly, the company's perspective is touched upon, but the explanation of 'global strategies' remains quite general. To reach a higher band, you should provide more detailed illustrations or specific scenarios to support your arguments, ensuring that the link between the international experience and the resulting benefit is explicitly stated for both stakeholders.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two main ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'For example', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition in the third paragraph ('For instance, there are few organizations who take part...') feels a bit disconnected from the preceding point about attracting talent. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring a tighter logical connection between sentences would enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'multi national companies', 'domestic environment', and 'capital expenditure'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'reasons of this new development' (should be 'reasons for') and 'know how of the company' (which is informal). While you attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary, some collocations are slightly unnatural. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that your vocabulary is consistently used in the correct context to convey your ideas with greater clarity and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'One of the major advantage' (should be 'advantages'), 'see a very little chance' (should be 'sees very little chance'), and 'its a two way process' (should be 'it's'). Additionally, there are some punctuation issues, such as the unnecessary comma after 'Although' in the fourth paragraph. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and refining your control over complex sentence structures to reduce these persistent errors.
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